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66. ...un alligator se tapit.

🕑 Added 2020-03-26 02:49:37 +0000 UTC

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Mecanimus

Sometimes, getting an advantageous bargain is also worth it ! Especially if it leads to more violence later... I hope you enjoy chapter 67!

Thorlol

Oh yes, please be careful about this. I love your story too much for this. I dropped a fiction that was very good because everything was starting to revolve around a prophecy. Suddenly the prophecy dictated the story flow and took away the excitement and you got the feeling that it didnt matter what the MC does because everything that happens is predetermined. Like right now, we already had the feeling that the trial will go in favour of Ariane but now the seer confirmed that she will be free. Now Im left without the excitement what happens at the trial because I know the outcome. Thats just a mild case but it could be worse with more prophecies to come. I know that your writing is excellent and that you could most likely pull it off to use such elements but I still advise caution because I like to be surprised and be left wondering what will happen in the future.

Mecanimus

:/ I'll be careful. I hope it works.

L Pedersen

I am conflicted. As a plot device or story element, I loath prophecy and forsight. It's really really hard to write a good story without it being singularly about the prophecy. There are so many pitfalls here and I worry. Also Ari will probably want to know why Aisha is only now trying to carry out her masters command instead of when they first met and the knight squad tried to kill Ari. On another note, I'm really looking forward to Ari's Magna Arqa. But I think I'll probably have to wait a good long while for that. I get the sense that for most vampires, becoming a master is inevitable and the only factor is time. But it wouldn't surprise me to learn that not all masters are able to become lords and that it takes longer for a master to become a lord than for a courtier to become a master. Also I'm ready to get off this boat, I'm already stuck at home, I don't need my escape into fantasy to suffer the same way :P

Bunny Waffles

Forgiveness is overrated. Violent retribution is much more fashionable.


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