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42. The Cruel Seas

🕑 Added 2019-12-02 01:49:37 +0000 UTC

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Mecanimus

I promise I'll do my best, even if the inspiration does not always come. Thanks

I love this story so much. The mc and her friends, really all the characters are so well done and likeable. Keep up the good work 👍

tibbish

L Pederson: yeah its possible Loth invented it first in story but if he did he wouldn't have used the name dynamite which was given to it by the Real World inventor

Mecanimus

Nicely spotted I'll edit lol. My bad nomally I check everything.

L Pedersen

Good find, could be Loth actually invented it though, and when he goes home to sweden after current events he befriends Alfred Nobel and lets him spread the new explosive. Would also explain why Nobel was such a philantropist :P

tibbish

Nitpick: The time period for dynamite (Ariane mentions earlier in this chapter that her coffin is supposed to resist dynamite) is wrong if you're holding to Real World timeline. It wasn't discovered until the 1860's and in story is supposed to be around 1812 or so. They would've used black powder as a blasting charge though. Brown powder didn't come until later too.

Thorlol

That chapter was golden :D

L Pedersen

It's not that, she hissed and to do so she needs to breath in air to expell it

ColourMyAlphabet

Welcome back! “Hsss.” “Don’t do that Mistress, or you will have to breathe more of this air.” I hate it when he is right. Huh, so she's still going through the motions of breathing, good for you Ari!

Mecanimus

Thanks! Both this and 43 are over 6K words, just give me a few hours I need to clean it up.

Mecanimus

It's one and the same.

Mecanimus

It's an actual shanty lol I only slightly modified it: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NzRRE175cu8

L Pedersen

Search youtube for Heather Alexander - High Barbary. I'm not sure if this was the inspiration or if there are many different songs like this that are similar but Ari's song was pretty similar.

L Pedersen

Welcome back! I hope you had a nice holiday, this was worth the break :P

Jacob

Lol that was a perfect sea shanty now just to find the right music to pair it with

Mecanimus

Aaaand I'm back. Thanks for your continuous support! You are the reason I keep writing seriously and I am super happy that you're here. This chapter was not proof read by the usual suspects Counter, Pringle and Jem so it might be a bit rough. Do let me know if you spot mistakes or there is stuff that is not clear. Alright I'm off to clean chapter 43...


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