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68. Dies Irae

🕑 Added 2020-04-08 02:17:03 +0000 UTC

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Lasne

Nice battle

Mecanimus

As long as you don't think vanilla human I'm happy hehe.

Vega

Sometimes I look at Ariane and instead of vampire I think Fey.

Chopper

Also books, she likes to read. Literate people were quite knowledgeable before the invention of television and other distractions.

Paul Wirtz

For blood, freedom and gunpowder! Most of the others were already covered.

Mecanimus

Short explanation at the beginning of 69.

Mecanimus

It's from Loth. I don't know if I need to justify this, as a lot of smithing knowlede comes from him.

Johannes Oest

I don't have a problem with that tbh. She lived with Loth for a long time. Loth lived through these times in medieval europe and maybe even fought battles in it. Didn't she have a dreamvision of a battle from Loths perspective after drinking his blood? And secondly there were references to medieval times before. I remember that she said that Bingle should sit at the round table or something like that. So she may just heard stories about it or just has some interest. Maybe Loth had books about the time too? So i think this should be fine

MrrC

One disconnect here - our heroine is not medieval. How does she know about full plate barding? She doesn't have seem to have the highest level of skills with traditional edged weapons (vs guns) ..... the whole "full plate barding" just kinda appears out of nowhere. It may be a more believable read if the idea came from her friend the smith....or she remembers that he described this etc.

andy may phan

I kind of interpret it as: a true bond Nightmare will have a sixth sense as to when their bonded needs them.

Mecanimus

Ok so all sentences that make me smile when I write them can make other people smile as well. Good to know! Also yes I remember that in Anita Blake the vampires duel for their name sometimes.

Mecanimus

=D It does doesn't it.

MrrC

The final sentence feels like foreshadowing what she will become - a warrior on par with her creator...and one uniquely modern enough to both use firearms and open minded enough to ally with traditional enemies.

L Pedersen

"Oh Sinead, Master of half-truths and boisterous claims, I bow before thine expert windbaggery. Your pompous turn of phrase allowed me to awe those mortals. I shall never doubt thee again, great one." - Much enjoyment was had, a few lols were even uttered. This sparked my original comment, I just loved this sentance. "So… so cavalier! Addendum one to the previous proposal, I shall establish working relationships with the powers that be and teach them proper manners! Being surrounded by a blazing fire and outnumbered by fanatics sworn to your destruction is no cause for such wanton vulgarity. Pah!" No matter what, Ari is always a lady of the very upper class. I think what I like more than anything else is that Ariane has pride. And not in a bad way, she's not prideful like you'll see cultivators be in those stories or prideful in the steriotypical sinful way you see in western fiction. She's like a cat, completely confident and unconflicted in her instincts. They're her instincts, of course they must be magnificent instincts! "Though, now that I think about it, if there is one I will have to find her and convince her that I am the Arianest of them all." - This sentence was great because it establishes the wonderful vampire law that vampires have the one name and only one vampire can have any one name at any one time. In LKH's universe they limit this to continents. Worldbuilding is always nice. Oh and you might want some kind of divider between Ari and Jimena horsing around and them walking towards the fight carrying shields. ps. I posed this once before but patreon deleted it the first time, I really wish they would stop deleting comments from patrons because since I'm supporting your content I'm clearly not spamming. I have no idea why some comments just get auto deleted, it's especially infuriating when you take the time to write something like this. I want to be clear though that this last paragraph is just me venting my frustrations and it is not directed at Mec, I love the story and I really should offer more feedback without needing to be promted. I'm just a lazy literacy vampire who only shows up to be fed!

Mecanimus

If you could tell me one or two that you like I would appreciate it, I'm trying to further my style as I mentioned.

L Pedersen

Could be either. I'm inclined to think that Methis followed them all this time, magical though she is she remains a creature of flesh and blood and that makes summoning less likely in my mind.

carebear90

I didn't expect the Nightmare to have followed her all this time. Or was she summoned somehow and I read it wrong?

L Pedersen

My god, so many awesome sentences in this one. I'm just gonna bask in the wonderfullness of it all

MrrC

love her as a war leader

Mecanimus

Good, though I will still give you cliffs on occasion huhuhuhu

Mecanimus

No thank you for the support.

Anghwrtais

Good chapter. I appreciate your taking the time to polish your chapters and present a complete product. I enjoy a longer fleshed out story much more than frequent deliveries of cliff-hangers. Keep up the good work.

Michael

Awesome as always! Thank you so much.

Mecanimus

I took a long time for this one, but it was extra long and I didn't want to end on another cliff. Next one may take some time as well because I need to pull of something difficult.

Mecanimus

Yet.

Mecanimus

I'm super glad to heae that. It might not look like much but I do try and improve. I also hired a pro editor with the Patreon money and will start wortking with them to improve my style starting from May.

ArturScott

This chapter is so good, thank you Mecanimus you are getting better with every chapter!

Noble Defect

glad to see my favorite vampire not sent to the gulag

Blake

yeah! You have no idea how many times i refreshed my browser waiting for this chapter after the previous cliffhanger.


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