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71. House Nirari

🕑 Added 2020-04-18 14:18:28 +0000 UTC

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carebear90

Why does he have to stop existing? He is not a king. He is the youngest progenitor out there. Most of the Lords and Ladies are way older than him. He is just the most powerful Vampire in North America at the moment. But he lacks the experience of a Lord. He was given his power by a potion, like the other progenitors. Not by working his way up through the ranks of power. He didn't even make any spawns yet. He only has his Vassal? (his sister?). Everyone else is from other Houses. If she becomes more powerful than him, it is entirely possible to leave him alive while usurping his position all the while making it seem like she's done him a favor. ^^

Thorlol

It's a good chapter thats showing a return to normalcy. She seem quite fine after the ordeal or atleast 'healthier' than expected. I would even go so far to say that she is more composed than before. Her vampiric insticts were more prominent against people who 'slighted' her before. Constantine's offer though, the sheer audiacity of him. Jesus, he really doesnt see anything wrong with his actions. But her accepting it is logical, how else would she get her hands on his blood before she is strong enough to just take it. Her statement at the end of the chapter was the best, because there is only one way to become queen and for that he needs to stop existing and I hope his death wont be a quick one.

Mythix

Thanks for the chapter !

All hail the Queen!

Mecanimus

No time laspe for the next two arcs.

Mecanimus

I was less inspired for this chapter, this is the result :/

Mecanimus

Next chapter is a thousand words in ;) just wait a bit.

Mecanimus

No I have big plans for the next two years.

Garbled Sounds

Woah, she is definitely ambitious, I'll give her that for that end. I am really looking forward to this next arc with the vampires.

SunderGoldmane

I sincerely hope there’s not a lot of time lapse , I enjoy the journey.

carebear90

If she bargains with him, I don't think, she'd kill him unless he breaks the bargain first. It seemed to me, that bargains are a very important key to her power, maybe even more so for devouerers than other vampires. But I'm not sure. If she promises to help him and keep him alive, she will do so until he betrays her. But that does not mean, that she cannot grow more powerful than him and take over as leader. She told him even in this chapter. Every power structure can be overthrown by nepotism and clan politics...

L Pedersen

That was quite nicely done. All of my issues with chapter 69 were addressed and quite well at that. I did say last time that it's hard to give good feedback on what is essentially an incomplete story. And I think from now on I'll only offer that kind of feedback at the end of arcs. The only thing from my original critique that I stand by is how you wrote the torture scene. It's very vague and I think that is deliberate but having seen the end of this now I'd even say to go harder, give us every gritty detail and show us Ari's struggle! But alas, I think it's moot. I think editing that scene would improve the story and set up future climaxes better (oh god but I cannot wait for Constantine to realize that his treatment of Ari will lead to his slow and painful end) but it doesn't need it, it would just be polish. I tip my hat to you. I think you've set up the next few arcs very well and I'm excited.

Seri

Thanks for the chapter! Nice to have some fluffiness, tempered by murder of course haha. I have to say though, the writing for this chapter is probably my least favorite so far. There's just a lot of I did this, I did that, I thought this, I thought that. Which does make sense to a degree since it's a heavy exposition chapter and Ariane's still confirming that she exists so there's a lot of introspection. But still, all the "I"s were a little jarring.

Bunny Waffles

Because you too understand the sweet seductive beauty of the lovely lines and rifling, as well as the brash, domineering proclamation of gunpowder. Honestly, was there ever a finer breed of weapon?

Jed Wolfgang

Ooooh, I like that goal.

Maradrax

Yesss. That end, Thank you.

Arkeus

All hail Queen Arianne.

Abdou Cissé

Why do I feel like her Soul weapon is going to be a gun?

I can't wait for more.

Mani

Wooooo, first? Edit now that I've read it: Awesome ambition at the end there. I'm excited to eventually see what kind of soul weapon Ariane gets. I hope it'll be some kind of firearm. I wonder how much detail we are gonna get of the next 2 years of working for Constantine, or if the story time lapse/skips through that.


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