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74. Vernissage

🕑 Added 2020-05-04 06:09:20 +0000 UTC

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Mecanimus

Nevermind that. WHERE IS LILIZATH? (Lily for short)?

Spectacular

Good chapter, but I'd suggest adding in a bit more description regarding why Sergei's party crashing is such a dire thing. Obviously, our heroine wouldn't exactly enjoy his sudden appearance, but as it is, it doesn't come across as an inherently hostile action. Perhaps adding in a sentence or two implying that he's being deliberately intimidating and disruptive would help.

Mecanimus

She certainly could use a break

Lasne

Some romance will be good for our dearest vampire.

shillbear

you know the better thing look the harder she seems to fall

Zeroks

I wonder if her paintings could end up being part of her magic in the future. Also money well spent to catch up to this, it's great.

Mecanimus

Damn it I had edited that. My internet is horrible.

Mecanimus

I got useful feedback and decided to rework.

andy may phan

"that my curiosity" (unfinished sentence)

ArturScott

I like how you eddit Torran explanation about why he likes Ari, it was good, but now it's much better!

Mecanimus

Good points.

Anghwrtais

This is probably too long and I apologize. I keep thinking about Ari’s and Torran’s relationships inevitable end. Will it be amicable or result in his death? Key point, Dvor power is based on their land. I can not imagine him permanently leaving his power base. While she could, and probably will travel the world at some point (hunting her progenitor) and Torran’s castle would be a good place to make a pit stop or temporary base of operations; she is GOING to rule the Americas. It will happen. That can not happen if she is playing consort in Hungary. As he has to return at some point; the question is ‘how do they part ways’. Off the top of my head: does he invite her home, get rejected and vow to return when he can? He becomes angry and tries to force her? Sulk and act like a wanker? If he reacts too poorly she’ll have to kill him. All of that of course assuming he doesn’t bite the big one and become the second of her loves to go the way of the dodo making her even more prone to tragic, romantic, melodramatic spinsterhood.

Mecanimus

If not she can always eat him later.

Mecanimus

Ah, my apologies. Just like yours, her curiosity was aroused. Edit made!

HumbleBee

”This is so unlike the usually self-assured lord that my curiosity” Her curiosity what?? Gaah Im dying of suspense for how the sentence will continue!

Abdou Cissé

I'm so happy for our little Ariane, she deserves to be happy. I just hope Torran lives up to it

Mecanimus

<3

Mecanimus

SLOW DOWN

Mecanimus

I am only getting started. =D

Darren Li

What I'm feeling internally... "AHHHHH YES WHOOOOO!!!! HELLL YEEAAAHHHHH!!!!"

Mecanimus

Nope, no skill only essence.

Svensonsen

Are they going to marry?

Svensonsen

Yes a little romance!!!!

SunderGoldmane

Ah, that was a treat to read

SunderGoldmane

I continue to be fascinated by your rendition of vampire culture.

ArturScott

It's so sweet and fun, love it.

Gardor

Wonder if her divination will come through her paintings. Also, can she Devour nonmagical skills, like could she learn how to play the violin from someone's blood?

Randee

I don't mean for this to be a harsh comment, I know it sounds harsh, I tried to rewrite it but it is, at its core, just a comment I wrote complaining about inconsequential things so I guess it's impossible not to sound whiny and harsh. In this line: “Yes mam. Say, I did not kill that one there on the ground. Can I drink him?” Ma'am is spelled mam, which looking it up is a relatively new regional spelling depending on where you are in the states. So obviously it's not that big a deal, if that's how it's spelled wherever you're from and you want to spell it that way then for sure spell it how you want. BUT it grates on my nerves and is such a pet peeve for me. It just introduces ambiguity. I hate it. Mam is already a word, etymology wise it's been used for hundreds of years as slang for mother through the word mama being shortened. Ma'am is to madam as mister is to master. The apostrophe is important! It's representing a dropped letter. Apostrophes in English always represent a dropped letter! Even when used to show possession, the apostrophe in apostrophe S is representing letters that are "supposed" to be there from Old English when possession changed the entire word ending but, long ago, got dropped from speech. It's like spelling any other contraction without an apostrophe. It's not right and I will defend my right to be needlessly angry about it. If there is any chance you could be convinced that mam is a heretical spelling that should be burned at the stake then I will take it. This isn't even an American spelling vs European spelling thing, I've never been to Europe, I was born in Utah and grew up in Washington. Google doesn't tell me what states spell ma'am as mam but, regardless of what states they are, I will fight them. Or, God forbid, if it has spread to other countries, I will fight those countries, too. Thank you for reading about this angry man screaming at the clouds.

Aapjuh

pff.. Metis will outrun that silly little pony Krowar!!

Mani

Awww, they're so sweet. And murderous


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