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138. Apex

🕑 Added 2021-04-28 10:41:43 +0000 UTC

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Mecanimus

Yeah sorry it's not perfect. I was a bit rushed by time maybe

Parry Henis

Thank you for the chapter! The word choices were amazing as always. The now uncomman but period appropriate words just add so much to the immersion imo. I would have enjoied a bit more discription in the second part though.

Epicmission

I loved this! Thank you!

RottenTangerine

Interesting chapter! I enjoyed the different points of view and the battle during the day. Seeing an average soldiers view on things was neat

Mecanimus

Sorry you didn’t like it. I hop it doesn’t ruin the rest of the story for you. Edit: by that I mean that you make good a good point especially the presence of Nirari meaning that victory is a foregone conclusion. I just accept that valuable feedback doesn't mean I wrote bad stuff, only that the direction I chose for a chapter disappointed some readers' expectation. Thanks for the feedback, it always halps me see my story from another angle.

Mecanimus

... I forgot them

Mecanimus

I almost called the chapter doom but thought it was too on the nose

Mecanimus

Will edit. There were still a few mistakes.

Mecanimus

Biggest one ever. I checked.

Mecanimus

;)

Mecanimus

Didn’t know how to include them sorry.

Mecanimus

Me too lol.

Venalitor

Wow. I think this takes number one for worst chapter of the series. Not a close number one either. It started off fine, but shortly after switching to Ariane's perspective, it just kinda went downhill. Nirari getting involved basically rendered everything after moot. That they accepted his off was just weird. What was he offering anyway? What the hell was with Martha? Why's she so annoying and pushy? Why was Ariane with the other vampires where she would make minimal difference? By the last bit of the chapter, immersion had been thoroughly lost and I couldn't really concentrate to read everything anymore anyway. It was just a big anti-climax to the big battle with the big threat. Leaves a bad taste.

Mai0e

Missed Jimea and the knights but despite that Great chapter!

Name not found

Something tells me Ariane is going to love Doom when video games eventually come around. RIP AND TEAR!

Enzo Elacqua

That was so hype. I could feel my own blood boiling and I’m not even there

Gardor

he could not help but think that the cannons were slowly done--> slowing down

Kota

I feel epic is the right word for this - especially Ariane's description of Nirari's deal and his speech afterward. Both in length and quality, this chapter truly was well worth the wait.

Kazzy

Wow, amazing

william wallace

Really great chapter. Even if there were no flaming pigs 🐷 🔥

Railsrains

I enjoyed this 😀

Andrew

Thank you!

Jon

Damn, that was intense. Great chapter!

Pierre Steiner

Aside from the chapter being very good, I feel like this is a defining moment in the story, both for Ariane personally as well as for the rest of the world

So good!

Young Youghurt

Wow the first half was like tower defense in club penguin but then second part became a hotline Miami.

MacDB

What a chapter!! It’s good to see another side to nirari aswell.


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