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150. Examination

🕑 Added 2021-07-22 10:26:03 +0000 UTC

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Rallaster

Yissss... Someone got demoted to target and judicious use of explosives was authorized. "bring the rain"

Desponark

I would recommend writing it as "HENKEL! STEINER! KOMMT HERAUS!”... "Kommt Ihr heraus" makes it sound like a question while "Kommt heraus" is an order. Also when yelling people tend to use the shortest phrases possible :)

Mecanimus

I planned to do that lol. My brain failed me once again.

Silverking

Great chapter, but I think the rhyme might be better if one of the "jaws" was turned to "maws", as opposed to using the same word twice.

Name not found

Ah, the invaders have just been re-designated as targets!

ShadeByTheSea

I can just see John lovingly "watering" it back at the Dream

Lyndwyen

Fair enough

Mecanimus

I totally forgot about it.

Lyndwyen

Not rly a good Question for this chapter but what happened to her cave shroud?

Mecanimus

I'm just keeping the scope of the story limited. They have their own mages, yes, but no vampires that 'we' know of.

blackzeros7

Hey I got curious about something. How is the rest of the world doing? I mean we can see Europe, but what about Africa? India? China? Japan? South America? I know most of the world was a colony at this point, but the indigenous people living there should have their own mages. Are the portals opening in other parts of the world? Are there Chinese Vampires? Maybe a famous anime inspired loli vampire?

thomas

You raise a valid point mechanimus and now I want a scene where she or a teammate takes a neck injury and are exclusively annoyed that they can't tell the other person off for it

Gwendolyn Simmons-LaRose

Vibrate that air

thomas

I like the way you think

Archaea2567

Thanks for the chapter.

Mecanimus

It's still an important part of speaking yelling smelling etc

Anghwrtais

May want to remove the line about not being able to breath.

Mai0e

Yes!

Andrew

Thank you!

Lictor Magnus

Yeeeessss! I’m getting my artillery wish 😂

Mecanimus

I foresee pigs in the not too distant future

Mecanimus

Going for kommt heraus for now, would that work?

Mecanimus

Who's going to say no?

Mecanimus

Ooooh I foresee a flaming future

Jon

For some reason, I have a feeling that flaming pigs might be seen in the near future. Maybe herded through an open portal?

Mai0e

HENKEL! STEINER! KOMMT IHR AUS! -> This should be „RAUSKOMMEN!“ oder „KOMMT HER!“. You formulated it like question, but it is an Order.

thomas

Yay artillery. I hope our heroine gets command of the artillery

MacDB

This is just getting better and better

Young Youghurt

Insignificant worm just roll over and die before our magnificent Ari the scorch of pigs!

Mecanimus

Ok I'm going to trust you on this.

Han Pol

Heraus Not Just Aus. And great chapter


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