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A Journey of Black and Red 203: Red then Black

🕑 Added 2022-08-15 23:47:50 +0000 UTC

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Lalazarus

Amd sheridan?! Alive and kicking! Love this one, thank youu!

Lalazarus

JOHN HAS GROWN SO MUCH OMG I'M SO PROUD

Pierre Steiner

No worries, you don't owe us anything anyway, I know I'm just happy to read this wonderful story you pulled right out of your synapses. I just thought I'd share the feeling as constructive feedback, I'm sorry if it impacted you. Also when I say unrefined, bear in mind it's compared to your best chapters, this chapter is already miles ahead of any story I've read online from a stylistic and narration point of view :) have a great day and thank you for your work!

Mecanimus

I think Cadiz called it the Thorn Queen's Garden.

Mecanimus

I needed some time to get my thoughts in order. The next two major arcs should follow each other closely. Sorry.

Mecanimus

RonGAR likes to write his thoughts and I have no problem with that. Also yes grampa is a nickname here, Gaelle and Sheridan are not related. I already stated that will and intent are important for vampires... so it will probably matter in John's future. ;)

Mecanimus

The possibilities here are still amazing.

Mecanimus

No just a Master, but ascencion comes with a brief power burst.

Mecanimus

No I had a certain lack of inspiration sorry.

Mecanimus

I want to remind people that the other characters' stories continue off screen.

Mecanimus

And thanks for the support!

RonGAR

“You have dramatically improved. You are a much cleaner fighter than when we first began, and so the time has come to focus on the next step of training: giving you experience fighting a superior opponent. My Magna Arqa is called Blade’s Edge and it is unfortunately a strike type. Nevertheless, it should still help you.” “You give names to Magna Arqa?” “Yes, it helps to memorize and understand them. I named yours ‘Garden of the Thorn Queen,” for example.” “Poetic, but I would rather choose myself. Speaking of superior opponents, you never mentioned what Nirari’s Magna Arqa was.” Question: I don't think Ari ever gave her Magna Arqa a name. #Justsaying

Arlano

Are you certain that Gaelle is his granddaughter? In this chapter I interpreted the "grabdpa" as more of a affectional nickname given to an old man. I wonder if he is still with his wife and if we will have news of his foretold kid.

Arlano

She never had one, servant are immortal. She had two vassals. The step below.

RonGAR

Mec already knows why I do this. But since you asked so nicely. I thought it would show more appreciation for the author that I comment on his work in detail. To show that I care about what the author writes and I am paying close attention. To me, its better than just replying 'Thanks for the chapter/update'. 🤷🏽‍♂️

Is there a reason for writing a comment the length of quarter of a chapter?

carebear90

As neat as all these transition chapters are... I really hope we'll get to the next arc soon. Every new chapter I have to wonder for a while what the heck is going on now and how much time passed since the last one... or... does it take place at the same time? I mean... one chapter she made a pact with Semiramis, bought a child and 'silenced' a nosey busy body. The next she's on Vacation at the first world expo and now we have a nice chapter about her retirement home and Doe's ascension. Don't get me wrong, I liked them all very much on their own. It's just a bit difficult for me to see any connection between them. Alright... maybe I'm just very impatient to find out what happened with the addict witch and Ariane's newly purchased baby. ^^

RonGAR

So is John Doe a Master now? Seemed like that was what that power up was all about. 🤔 How old is he now? Is Gaelle gonna make it? She is Sheridan's granddaughter and the speaker's grand-niece ( if he cares about that. I say that because I assume as an immortal looking back, there is going to be a certain point where your family tree has diverged so much from where you left it that you don't care anymore.) Merritt coming in with the stall action. Holding the line, running down the clock till the sun went down. Wonder if John Doe's Magna Arqa will have a specific limitation like Jlimena's? For example, once Ari gives him the word, he becomes a brute of pure will, that won't quit till he completes his task/mission. There is actually a 'Marvel' Character like that. He's called Gladiator. He is the guardian of the princess/queen of the Shi'ar Empire. His monstrous near unstoppable strength is based on his 'Will'. Nothing can stop him because he believes nothing can. So was wondering if John's Strenght was based on that. That aside, love that she kitted out our boy JD. Magic Shields, Armor. Big Old Thor like hammer. She was making sure her right-hand man had the ability to do the job and return home. As for the strategy of the Liche... attacking multiple targets to hide your real objective, while only attacking during the day, is pretty smart. Next time they should plan on doing it near sun up, so they have more time. Humans and mages are getting drained and wiped out. And like always those in power are too far removed to take any of it seriously. So they complain and imagine the worse, then place the blame for all the world's evils on their political enemies, minority groups, or the poor. I bet you if they were attacked inside of their cigar rooms by a Merghol hound eating their face's one by one. I bet the survivors would sing a different tune. Bet they wouldn't care how these creatures got there and would be funding anyone willing to fight them off. 😎 And it was nice that Arianne set up a retirement village for all the people that supported her throughout her years. Filled with doctors, nurses, and beautiful landscapes with everything they may need to spend their last day in restful peace. Round of applause for our girl for that.👏🏼👏🏼👏🏼 Thanks for the update all the same.

Thorlol

Damn, Johns faith in Ariane is on a god-like level. The possibilities in the faen world would be amazing.

HumbleBee

Everytime she meets a new human I am wondering ”ooohhh, is this the one?”. I am also wondering if the vampires under her will find a servant.

Olof Karlsson

Thanks for the chapter!

The appearance of Sheridan makes me think. When will Arianne find a new servant? Maybe a soldier during the WW?

Jeanean

My guess as well. It didn't seem quite powerful enough to be a complete Magna arqa, especially if my guess is right and it is similar to Jimena's, just that for him "Justice" is the perfect completion of his masters orders. It would cement his position as the perfect goon for all eternity.

Kristof Dohrmann

When Urchin became a master, it was implied that John was a courtier, but what is described in this chapter sound like a magna arqa. We know that Arianne advanced through the ranks very fast, so it's unlikely that John is already a lord, more likely he is a master now and already showing signs of what his magna arqa might look like.

Mai0e

So is John a Lord or a Master now?

Pierre Steiner

Great chapter but it felt a bit unrefined compared to the rest of the novel. Might be me on 4 hours of sleep though

Pierre Steiner

Loving the older characters making an appearance, really gives a sense of the passage of time. Also, nice evolution on Doe, was that a Magna Arqua?

Dipped In Butter

I absolutely loved this chapter. And Sheridan, along with Dalton, is among the #1 homies for me for sure so I'm glad you brought him back to remind us of how badass he was.

Amazing chapter, thank you.


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