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A Journey of Black and Red 224: Three parts Ascension

🕑 Added 2023-02-13 13:45:00 +0000 UTC

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karthi vasudevan

I have eagerly anticipated each chapter since the 20s! I have laughed, loved and rejoiced with the characters. Now this most satisfying of conclusions! Truly what an epic journey. Thanks for everything!

Anonymous

Hahaha curse you author god!

Mecanimus

Yis

Mecanimus

I was honestly very worried about how the ending would be perceived but so far people seem satisfied. Now I'm concerned about the epilogues hahaaaaaa,

Mecanimus

I'll write that part again. It's my mistake.

Mecanimus

I'll replace with Warten Sie einen Moment" as suggested.

Mecanimus

Sorry I'll make the correction.

Mecanimus

Haha I actually managed to steal your eloquence! I feel very proud.

Mecanimus

Sorry but the Bingle god... is ME!

Mecanimus

Yeah I will reflect on that in a special note at the end because it has been, no pun intended, a journey.

Mecanimus

Weeeeell there will be epilogues, yes.

Mecanimus

I'll write this part again, extend the scene so Jimena and Semi die in John's recollection. Sorry about that the entire series still lacks polish tbh.

Mecanimus

Yeah I think so too though I feel the need to wrap things up first.

Mecanimus

Will be weird to end this over the epilogues.

Mecanimus

All great deductions!

Mecanimus

Technically he did the takedown and Ari did the execute. ;)

Mecanimus

RIP

RonGAR

@Arlano Hmmm gonna have to disagree with you there buddy. He is crispy! Deep fried. He is Ash! There is no 'merely' teleporting into the epic center of a 13kiloton explosion and being able to walkway with a Tan. No matter what stage the explosion is in.

Arlano

We're not 100% sure that Slava is dead. He is "merely" teleported at the epicenter of the explosion after it blew. Radioactivty and the harsh wind after the explosion might very well not kill him.

Mythix

Would have been cool to have the Bingke kill the first. Still it was a great twist, thanks for the chapter

Gibborim

Nirari has no need to limit who can wear it, he can simply kill anyone foolish enough to trespass. Using it as a treat? The armor is Malakim's cage.

MrrC

The magic runes that light up.....we'd know Nirari is intelligent. By limiting who can use this and using it as treat for his most important tools --- he can control who has access to powerful protection...and that means limiting it to devourers. The swap is for his benefit not theirs.....the big question is how can Slava trigger it unless the one that Nirari was originally wearing was a master set -- and Slava knows how to trigger the master set vs the secondary set. Lots to imagine here - @mecanimus did a good job of giving us enough to imagine without building out every detail of canon.

Gibborim

The armor set is a contingency item that swaps the two people wearing it when the wearer of the master set is in peril. Urchin yoinks it and Slava puts it on, presumably expecting that he will be promptly swapped with Nirari who is suffering the peril of being in the middle of a nuclear blast moments after detonation. I see no reason to speculate that it is keyed specifically to Devourers.

Emily Gurnavage

Ahh, I must have lost my place and skipped bits. I did not have a lot of time to read it - I will have to give it a second read with time to really dedicate to it.

Oxylus

The armor is the one that Malakim was wearing. Urchin snatched it as he died. Slava took it and put it on which allowed him to swap. "The armor disappears from his body before it, too, is ruined. Urchin stands next to me with the set in his hands. He looks uncertain. They… they swapped places? The twinned armor allow them to swap places? Was it his plan from the beginning?" Slava: "He walked to Urchin and grabbed the pilfered set of dragon armor, shedding his own to put it on with slow, deliberate movements. The runes engraved in the surface had cooled but now that Slava wore it, their intensity increased again." I agree with the random person, I think it was keyed to a Devourer. My headcanon is that it's only keyed to male devourers just as an extra F U to Ariane.

RonGAR

Same!

JustARandomPerson

I'm not certain on this, but my guess is that the armor is "keyed" to allow Nirari to swap with any member of the Devourer bloodline who wears it, which is why Slava was able to use it.

Emily Gurnavage

Loved it. Got me all anxiety filled and twitchy, right before work lol. Typing this at the clock in clock. With Slava at the end though - am I supposed to know *how* he did the teleport swap? Malakim and Nirari had paired dragon scale armor with teleportation inscribed, so that.makes sense. But does Slava also have some? Was he still with Nirari during the dragon fight and got armor too? Nirari let him keep it? Or was the swap a spell of some sort that Nirari taught some of his spawns but not Ariane, since he threw her away so fast?

Albedo's Ahoge

Excellent! Great work with this chapter and ending. Very satisfied. Thank you so much!

RonGAR

Comparing to GOT Season 8? Yes, but only in the way that I fear something that started out great and well-paced will meet a poor watered-down, and tasteless ending due to the fact that the writers and executive producers were in a rush to end the project and turn their minds to other things. Will this story end? Yes of course, but it currently reads like a rapid-fire checklist of events, moving so fast you got no time to let it all seep in. Something is mentioned like Jimena, and Semiramis dying/being killed, something we can all agree was a big event with big consequences, yet it barely gets half a sentence before we are on to the next thing. You basically have to pause 'imagine' the details of that moment of those characters, and everything they might have said or tried to do before the end for yourself before moving on. That or reread the chapter a few times to make sure you didn't miss anything. But it goes to my point that big things are just being brushed over, and when things are so close to the possible end (still crossing my fingers that is not the case) then why the need to rush it, or brush over anything? There are ppl here who still don't even know who Constance is! 😂 Okay, okay, that's not Mec's writings fault 😂 that is some attention deficiency issues right there. 😂😂😂 ------- As for Nirari walking into a room. To that I would say, he was walking around with daylight as a weapon and all his inherit badassery, so there is that reason things could've ended pretty quickly for the trio. But I get your point. Given the 'pacing' of the chapter, slowing things down for 3 or 4 paragraphs to explain how Jimena and Semiramis died, would've thrown the pace off. Yes, That is true. But can we agree, that they deserved more than 'HALF a sentence' shared between them??? #justsaying

RonGAR

That is ONE 'opinion'. 😑

Tjolbin

Are you really comparing this to GoT? The deaths are exactly as they should be though, 'Nirari walks in to a room, everybody dies' (im sure there is a joke in there somewhere). Cant have a antagonist with undeniable, unstoppable power all series long just to nerf him in the final fight

RonGAR

Yea you're right. It sucks but, personally I was never really a big fan of letting ppl go, just so they could train up, and attack you again in a few decades. I understand the numbers of the community is low, but its clear that if most of the wars went the other way, Ariane would've been killed if they were the ones victorious. So why should she give the leeway to attack her repeatedly?

Deltoroid

Yeah, a sentence like Semiramis lay dead on the floor, but John didn't care. Or Semiramis slowly turned to ash, John was sad he failed to protect her despite miss Ari's command.

Deltoroid

I'm gonna say, this is the perfect place to end the series... Maybe one or two post end chapters. You have something amazing on your hands and forcing the story through more arcs will just lower the quality.

RonGAR

@Louis Nel That's easy... she was killed by Nirari. It was 'QUICKLY' mentioned by John. SMH. Wish there was more 'DETAILS' on that. Don't know why Mech feels he needs to rush at bullet speed through everything. 🤷🏽‍♂️

Robert Hinshaw

I think there will always be complaints about who dies, but some need to go otherwise the stakes (pun intended) aren't high enough. Even if the readers protest, at least in future battles we feel tension because we know things could legit go sideways.

Louis Nel

I also am not clear on what's happened to Semiramis.

RonGAR

Wait a minute Wait one minute.... Did I read and re-read those last few paragraphs right? Is it over? Did Nirari actually die when Slava sacrificed himself and brought Nirari out right under Ariane's fangs? Did she drain him completely and take over the power that was once going to Semiramis? Was that it? was that the end of it? --------------- One of the things that upset me in this chapter was the deaths. Not only the ppl who did die, (that we know about) but how quickly it happened. No Pageantry, just gone. John Doe and Slava being the only exceptions. Just wish I had more detail. Because if Journey of Blk and Red is going to end soon and for good, (Which I swore we had a few more years of posting to go. smh) then what's the point of rushing through it? Feels like Season 8 of Game of Thrones all over again. Trying to rush to the finish in 8 episodes when HBO would've gladly paid for 20 in order to do it right! #justsaying. ------------- Seems like Urchin has a big target of his own. Some big powerful being he is holding a grudge at. My guess is Vanhiem himself. For not giving him the necessary tools and training he needed to survive. I Think most of the Vanhiem dislike their flippant and flighty progenitor. ---------------- Octavo admitted he was wrong... SMH Like Duh bro. Duhhh. Hmmm: With Slava, Jimena, and Mannfred, gone. That means Phineas and Ariane are the last survivors of the Knight escape. .... .... and the Vanhiem wolf girl who ran away on her own. ----------------- Soooo Stiglitz was not part of the trio from a few chapters ago who ordered the bomb dropped on the vampires and themselves. And he turned out to be crucial to the war effort and getting everyone pointing in the same direction. His character came far. He and a lot of ppl are still radioactive as hell thou. And that FOURTH explosion in their face didn't help the situation. LOL ------------------- Anyway TY for what you've done so far.

RottenTangerine

Great chapter here. I can't wait for more. The loss of so many great side characters is a definite bummer though.

Cormac

I have been reading this story since there were fewer than twenty chapters on Royal Road. To see it all come to this is quite something. Thank you for all the hours of fantastic reading.

Anonymous

Is Ari going to get to have a conversation with the bingle’s god and maybe Vanheim will make another appearance?

RonGAR

I needed a moment. Even now, I type with numb fingers. What a heavy chapter. SMH I really thought for a second that if this situation worked out, then this was going to end with all her friends and allies walking out of this situation intact... but that can never be now. Im shaking over here. So many dead and dying... what will Ari have when its all said and done? What kind of victory is it to win, but to lose nearly all that matters? There is sooo much to write but... I can't right now. I need more time. Maybe a day to let this all settle in. What a chapter!!!

RonGAR

Oh shit.............

Flemmy

I don't usually write comments, i have been following this story since 2021 i think, each week waiting for a new chapter. I want to thank you Mecanimus for bringing this story to life, this was an amazing adventure to read. I remember some rough times, but you always managed to go through it and deliver quality. While i ignore if this marks the end of Journey, i can however picture a before and an after of this absolute beast of a chapter. I can't help but to feel sentimental about it, thank you for everything so far, it was a blast of a reading

Flover

Bravo.

Jeanean

What?

SunderGoldmane

I legit cried.

Joe ?

I can't believe we're finally here. I was dreading it because this story has been so consistently there for me for years now, but I feel like it ended exactly how it had to.

Nait02

Tftc... Some Mistakes (I believe): "I deflect the first blow and am still sending like a puppet against the nearest tree." -> "I deflect the first blow and am still sent like a puppet against the nearest tree." As well as “Wachte mal. Wait a moment, Herr vampire." -> “Warte mal. Wait a moment, Herr vampire."

Riprexe

Thank you Jiwa for what is now my favourite story!

Narogah

"Wachte mal" should be "Warte mal"

Lazy Lemon

He isn't but he has a dragon armor linked to malakim's one which made them switch places

Kristof Dohrmann

Great chapter. "Wachte mal" should be Warte mal", though I'd use "Warten sie", which is more formal and fits better with him addressing Urchin as Herr Vampire. Alternatively "Warten Sie einen Moment", which is a more literal translation of "wait a moment", or "Warte einen Moment", which is less formal.

Kyle Pemberton

Can anyone explain what happened there at the end? How can Nirari be in two places at once?

closeded

Seriously, before this one the dragon chapter was my favorite, now... You've litterally outdone yourself.

closeded

That was pretty great. The twists at the end were entirely unexpected, but you prepped them that they felt satisfying, rather than cheap. Poor Jimena... and pretty funny that the mother's death was so anticlimactic. And John and Bingle for the win! Seriously. I can't properly express how much I liked this chapter.

Andrew

Thank you!

Mai0e

Thanks for the Journey! Looking forward to the epilogue and future other stories you might come up with. I‘am hoping that some question marks get resolved in the epilogue. Is Cadiz dead? Is Ari now able to walk under the sun after consuming her sire and his mother?

Jo

This was actually a very good Climax to the story. Congratulations, many very good authors strugle with rhis and have done worse.

StarWolf

Great chapter… but I would like to see that last paragraph expanded on and the weave and the song expanded a bit more. I hope there are a number of epilogue chapters to follow… 1 day, 1 week or month, 1 year, 10 years, 100 years, 500 years, 1000 years, 3000 years and or whenever the spheres are aligned.

Karthic

HOLY SHIZ NIT

Jan Verner

Thanks for the story. I was afraid how you are going to finish it and how she is going to beat him. This was nice meaningful end. Sad about who gets killed, but I expected way worse.

Olof Karlsson

Thanks for the chapter!

LenoraeKB

Damn that swap got me. The build to her beating nirari outside was so fantastic that I didnt even consider an extension. Jimena and aintza dying offscreen hurts for sure though.

Necrotyr

No, Slava, Ari's brother in blood

Elaine

amazing chappie

Eric

So Constance got nuked ?:(

Eosus

This would make a great epilogue "So I can just order blood online now? How convenient!"

matt

Well fuck me. So she claimed Sovereignty?

Necrotyr

Aww... I still hope we get to see Ari use a computer

Jason Bryant

Noooo Jimena!!!!

Young Youghurt

This story belongs to absurd fiction becuase the saviour of the world was a British bloke Bingle. I didn't realise Ari's power was the same one as that naruto's milf goddes. Thank you for this incredible story.

Mecanimus

Sorry for sacrificing your Eponym.

John Doe

Oof, a lot of good characters died. I'm particularly saddened by Jimena and Doe.

Hayden Leech

I’m not crying you’re crying!

SDCard

Thanks for the chapter! Jimena... :(

Mecanimus

Note: this is not the end of Journey, however this is the last 'official' chapter. The next ones will be short epilogues.


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