Patrefans
Mecanimus  from patreon
Mecanimus patreon

Changeling Part 5

🕑 Added 2023-06-07 18:30:17 +0000 UTC

Comments

John O'Connor

Looking good so far just wish RR chapter numbers were same as Patreon numbers.

Smaug

The growth in strength seems a little fast and undeserved to me. I think you needlessly skipped fun parts like training and furnishing/hanging out in the hideout, traveling the city. I agree the other commenters that the combat sections feel a little too long, inconsequential and kinda hard to visualize the way you keep introducing new monsters and locations. Probably a good idea to cut them down or space them out better.

Mecanimus

I feel like it's important for her to power up in a way that is deserved when I so clearly stated she was struggling against even the weakest D-class uders.

Kazith

I love your other stories, truly, but I feel like this one is lacking the depth of character interaction that you’re so amazing at creating. Nezra seems a bit linear so far and these kind of one-off portal chapters feel a bit hollow. I do realize that you’re still slowly building the story. I find myself skimming past the action because it feels like it lacks purpose. Not sure if that helps at all and I’ll still give it a few more chapters to grab me. Thanks for all the effort you put in!

Haran

I agree. It’s typical of the stories with dungeon or portal runs, they are by their very nature repetitive instances of fighting monsters in places that doesn’t matter. Story wise it’s dangerous territory.

andrew barnes

I like it so far, but honestly exploring all these one off world's that might not ever matter again to the story is losing its appeal fairly quickly. The appeal of this story at least to me is how humans interact with each other when there given magical super powers and scifi tech. Over half this chapter could have gotten hand waved away in a single paragraph and I'm doubtful anyone would notice. Though this is just my personal opinion maybe everyone else is more invested in these micro adventures then I am.


More Creators