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Magical Marvel: The Rise of Arthur Hayes : Ch. 87

🕑 Added 2025-06-02 19:54:26 +0000 UTC

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Ejaaz

I will try to implement this feedback.

Matthias S

I understand the direction of the story, but I think it would make more sense to frame it differently. Right now, it sounds like he is scared of the Covenant. That is understandable, but also somewhat weak, especially since he can easily create a situation where no supernatural forces are expected (implant disease, transfigure a gun, imperio him to do something stupid, use mysticism...). But what if you say that taking his life is not enough? The MC wants to see him burn; all his achievements, reduced to ash. His alliances broken, his family disgraced, his dirt in public. And then, and only then, has he permission to die. Perhaps even lynched by the people he trafficed, that he felt so high above. (something inspired by reefas death in babylon 5, https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Zly_tL5mMc8) Ofc, feel free to adopt this as you see fit. Or leave it as is, maybe you are cooking something different.

Nazarickk

Thanks for the chapter


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