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Chapter 90 - Vigil

🕑 Added 2025-10-03 11:51:18 +0000 UTC

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Benjamin Thomas

I'm not going to edit this one. My reasoning is that it's on par with writing, as a quick example, "Augustus shot a ball of fire across the room." I haven't explicitly noted he swung the wand, or that the fire erupted from the wand, but it should be inferred by the readers. In this case, it should be clear that she either fell backward, or onto her side then onto her back, or any number of ways the reader might imagine it. Sometimes it's just not worth writing every physical action, especially in places where it doesn't challenge people's belief that something can occur. Glad you're enjoying it :) Still no issue with you sharing your thoughts, in case you're wondering!

Gardor

"Her legs shook, managed two steps, then gave up. She let herself fall, sprawling across the cool tile" "She just lay there, staring at the ceiling. Breathing." I mean, feel a little lame compared to that earnest conversation in the comments, but she should be on her stomach, not staring at the ceiling. I also enjoyed the chapter.

Benjamin Thomas

Thank you! The compliment actually means a lot to me. It was noted very early on by a few (very supportive) readers that I was skipping or glossing over such moments, and they were absolutely correct. I was falling into a bit of a trap in trying to get from action moment to action moment to keep things rolling. I'm very happy to hear they're hitting the right notes for people. :)

Jani Aartti

TFTC! This was a nice chapter. Practically speaking, nothing of import happened. But the character dynamics, the small details *chefs kiss*. Fantastic "palate cleanser" of sorts. Looking forward to seeing the ramifications of everything that happened!


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