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5-35 I am Ulustrahs wrath

🕑 Added 2020-10-04 21:17:05 +0000 UTC

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Edited 10-30-20 to fix the long list of errors, including some that were not pointed out. Than you again WhiteRabbit

Thank you for pointing all that out. This just shows I am tired and writing to quickly. Unfortunately I am working 7 days a week now, and my wife is disabled. She requires a lot of assistance while I am home, and there isn't any time to write in peace. I will think of some way to manage it all eventually. Just gotta push through and do my best, it will work out in the end. Thanks again.

WhiteRabbit

Ulustrahs wrath -> 's improve moral. -> morale role of hostility-> this part is unclear, she could be hostile, but is not the concept of hostility. mornings light-> 's ravens head-> 's taller than her , with -> don't need a return here glitter root-> Glitterroot? deep scrap in his armor. Before dashing -> deep (scratch?) in his armor before dashing worthless Goddesses-> Goddess's Ulustrahs-> 's Ulustian-> should this be Ulustrian? m, Alyaise-> me whyUlustrah -> space

Believe it or not I had to shorten this. When I was done writing it, it was 14k words long. I took a big bite out of the end and moved it to the next chapter, and cut out some confrontations with Alayse. Also I have noitced I spell her name Alayse, Alaise, and Alaiyse. I tried to root all that out here, but if you notice anything but Alayse, please point it out. Just more signs I am writing while tired and losing focus.


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