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HTN 5-11 The forest nightmare

🕑 Added 2021-01-26 14:26:27 +0000 UTC

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Yea that worked out well, having Heather feel the pain that Quinny wouldnt, and the fear because unlike the others she doesnt see dying the same way as a game. All of that really worked well in my opinion. The other section works but maybe for a different time, you are right it didnt feel like it wouldve fit in this chapter.

Couple of notes: I was originally going to have it grab Quinny, and run off with her, but I keep using Quinny as a punching bag, and I realized the better target was Heather. I was then going to come up with a heroic scene where Frank arrived to save the day but isn't that cliche by now? I closed my eyes and gave up on all my preconceived ideas and said "Let's just let the story go where it goes and see how it turns out." And you get Webster being the hero. Also I cut a section out because I was worried it didn't fit the tone of my story. It was a rather blunt conversation about the world and sex. I am going to post the snippet as a patreon bonus, but I am not going through the trouble of editing it.


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