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Book 1: Prologue: The Last Day And The First Day

🕑 Added 2025-08-03 16:42:27 +0000 UTC

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The Time walrus

I definitely feel like it does a better job setting up... basically everything actually. I'm not sure if it would fit with Grace's character, it kind of goes against her philosophy, but I would have loved a good monologue from her instead of just grinning. But that's just because I'm a sucker for a good dramatic monologue. Reading this also made me realize I hope we get at least a little bit more of the original Grace back. She's silly and naive, but I can't help but love her self assuredness and drive.

Bunny

Wow! Your revision turned out great. Im happy you took the time to rewrite it, it gave the first chapter alot of depth. Gone is the cringy schoolshooter, giving stage to an intelligent, somewhat crazy and mysterious girl. I liked it alot! Already looking forward to the next chapters!


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