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Issue 3 - Pg 19
🕑 Added 2020-02-03 14:01:01 +0000 UTCGwen is starting to use her new found knowledge to her ability. Or at least that's her goal.
Pg 20 is going to be a little late. I've been sharing alot, and well my partner's sick relative passed today. So gonna take some time to help her, and I will get up pg 20 hopefully only a day or two late.
Comments
Martin Lock
Not all the speech seems quite on course this time. "How are those boots fit?" is a bit strange, I'd suggest "Do those boots fit okay?" I suppose "I just wan't" may be Gwen just slightly slurring her speech, but "I just wasn't" is more regular. Panel 3, what's still adjusting, the boots or the feet? "They are tight, and I'm still getting used to them." There should certainly be a space, and maybe a dash or starting a new sentence, before "I just don't ever get to wear hee-" Panel 4, it's heels all the time, not "heals"... Maybe "I like to wear them all the time." Panel 5 is fine as it is, anyway, and it's a great page, definitely!
Roseleaf
Gwen might have some lessons to learn when it comes to this power. Thank you for your sympathies
Alex Smyth
That is a good plan Gwen, except you said "I only wear heels. Like wear them all the time". You only needed to say that you are able to walk in heels and that's it Gwen. Good luck try to walk flat on you feet, Gwen. lol Sorry to hear about your partner's relative. My sympathies to you both. Take all the time you need.
