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Spire's Spite - Arc 3 - Chapter 2

🕑 Added 2025-01-12 02:00:03 +0000 UTC

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yohan gu

Nice!

Octophobia

Made an edit: The stone-brick front face of the house was close to the street, merely twelve feet away. Rose bushes grew below the windows, thorns dripped with rain and the buds were closed as the flowers were not in bloom. Well-kept clover covered the dirt, the teal, ink-spill splotches over the green canvas presented a pleasing picture. Behind the building Fritz supposed there was a far larger yard similarly maintained, though he could only guess what lay beyond his view, save one tall tree that poked above the house's roof.

yohan gu

Yes! Specific items that exist in relation to the particularities of an environment are a great addition to the worldbuilding! It would be great if it was made clearer. Still, such special plants should appear perfectly normal to the characters, so it shouldn’t be presented as an element foreign to them

Octophobia

I might have to reword my description of the yard, it was mostly meant to be out the back not out the front. Quite correct to be pointed out. As for the clover, its a weird 'influenced' version specifically growing in rain city that stops the dirt from turning to mud with fine absorbent roots. The crew don't have any frame of reference for this, so its just clover to them. Maybe I'll change it's colour to make it more magical seeming. Thanks for the feedback.

yohan gu

This is a very minor nitpick I have with several stories (I imagine, written by people used to American suburbs) that portray houses in cities, especially in wealthy areas in the city center, as having a “well kept yard” in front, surrounded by some small transparent non-obstacle. To put it bluntly, this is not a thing and makes no sense and in my personal crusade for better representation of pre-suburbia cities, I’ll explain why. First off, an observation: if you tour any medieval, renaissance, baroque or neoclassical city, up to Haussmann’s Paris, you’ll notice none have features like this (there are some weird cases here or there, but I’ve never seen a proper “lawn” in front of a house). Houses and buildings in general will be directly on the street, even though the street or square itself may have some public garden, especially in the 19th century. Then, the building will often have an inner courtyard, that will serve to both give natural light to the building and provide an open air space (where you can park whatever you need, or put a garden if you so wish). In cases where the house has a garden of a more serious format, it will be in the back and, most importantly, surrounded by walls or high fences with nasty points and enough hedges to hide the view. Now, onto the logical reasoning why it’s weird to have a lawn in front of a city center house: space is at a premium there, the cost per square meter is high and you’ll always prefer to have enjoyable space over wasting it on a lawn. You may want to impress people, that’s a pretty valid point, but then, you can just have a splendid façade, which is more impressive than some trimmed grass. Or you could have a beautiful façade and a nice ornamental garden (with trees, hedges and flowers arranged in French garden style) but the garden would still be wasted space. The space in the lawn itself is unusable unless hidden away. No one wants to spend time in a place where everyone can have a look from the street. And in the center of walkable cities, you’ll have plenty of passersby. So, why not get a larger house and put the outside space you want to have in the center, to get a nice light well for your inner rooms and have it all hidden away from onlookers? Or hidden in the back, if you have enough space and want a large garden, so it isn’t in the way of people entering and leaving and you can have some privacy. The constraints of space are obviously different in the countryside, and what y is described here, with a larger garden all around and a more classy building, might recall Renaissance villas. Not in the most crowded and expensive parts of the city center, though. Now, something that only refers to Rain city: with constant rain, won’t the clover-covered dirt become mud in no time? I don’t know if it’d look good to have a mud-field in front of one’s house. Again, this a trademarked minor nitpick, but my passion for historical cities compels me to share it. Historical architecture is very cool! Hope you find this comment interesting and are not irritated by the pedantry.

yohan gu

I hope they’ll climb the mer spire again. As said in the discord a while back, this would allow them to get more resources, because they’ll always need more money and their impressions of the cost of living from when they were in the districts are horribly wrong, good gear is expensive and they might want to get a taste of luxuries; they would gather more treasures and get a chance to train, which is essential to be ready for the rain spire and to stay sharp in the months of wait. Now that they’re level 10 minimum and have completed the spire, they can climb a few simple levels, find one suitable for their training, or that would earn them enough cash, spend some time there and get out at floor 3 or 6 if they so choose. These climbs would be easy and don’t have to be detailed, maybe just a mention they did them and of what they earned and some scenes of training inside the spire. Like Bert trying to teach Dale to fight. Also, Spire meat is probably beyond expensive, but it is better for climbers to eat it, since it makes them stronger, so a couple days here and there to go collect some with porter-Cal would improve their physicality (or at least, keep it at optimal shape)

yohan gu

A small bit of dusksong to lubricate interactions, I like it. Do they have some means of keeping the humidity out? It looks like everything would be damp, in time, with the constant rain.

yohan gu

Please, no

Octophobia

Thanks! :)

Kronos

Tftc! “As soon as the nine triads are provided and the contract is signed and sealed." ->I’m pretty sure it should be 6 triads here.

Moon Winchester

I WANT GROUP TATTOO'S!!!!!


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