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A Day Off No Matter What pages 2-3 WIP
🕑 Added 2020-04-05 11:19:45 +0000 UTCHere's newer versions of pages 2 and 3. Any feedback welcome.
Thoughts on page 2 so far-
- Panel 1: I had the panel gutters layer hidden, and misjudged how far to draw.
- Panel 2: I'm not sure if you should see the location they are traveling into inside his outline, or make it white.
- Panel 3: Lucy's proportions seem off here, I think her legs are too long. She seems too tall compared to Annie.
- Panel 4: I still need to write the dialog for these pages.
Thoughts on page 3-
- Panel 1: I think Annie should be the one further ahead, just to keep Annie on the right and Lucy on the left.
- Panel 2: Might be done, but there's something about Lucy's face that bothers me. Maybe it's just that I'm so used to drawing her with glasses.
- Panel 3: I need to fix the shape of Lucy's breasts. One or the other. They are different shapes and sizes.
- Panel 4: Something seems off, but it might just be the odd pose.
- Panel 5: I don't know if they should have an umbrella, which would alter the shading here.
