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Updated chapter 5

🕑 Added 2022-01-25 17:50:17 +0000 UTC

Comments

Fucker007

Read till 5th chapter. Is there new stuff somewhere?

John Lewis

I think he has vanished.

Wane watanabi

You should add Jack's ugly friend Tom to the mix hehehehe Amber and Bill love that.

Lionheart021

While waiting for the Stacy chapter and chapter 6, I read this again today for the 4th time and that scene where Amber rolls the condom on with her mouth is so damn hot!! I love it. I also think I'm a bit slow because I just realised, at the end, where it's implied that Jack was fucking Amber in the shower, he didn't have a condom. I hope this leads to what he suggested, i.e. Amber forcing Bill to wear a condom while she allow Jack to bareback her.

SE

Jokes on you, you're fired! jk, too tempting of a joke

Mike litterus

We are in the last 5 days of February 😄 looking forward to hear about Stacey! I sent these stories to all my coworkers and they love them (I think)

Gonzo161996 .

So, Stacey's part is a separate chapter? Or, is it included in chapter 6?

SE

Never, it's a fucking scam. Talented writer, but scam artist. So sad.

LeoTheLion

when will stacey's story comeout?

Lionheart021

Was a bit worried about the blackmailing part, as I feel the consenual nature of the relationship between Amber, Bill and Jack is what made this story so hot...but you managed to turn it around and win me over. A private porno for their wedding anniversary is awesome. I can't wait to find out what depraved and nasty acts Amber will get up to.

SE

Communication is pretty important, as well as content. I support your writing and hope to see more from you. I'll pop back in a few months.

John Lewis

Update made it better. Also the edition of a sweaty Amber. Can't wait for part 7

SE

Anything new? I don't want to be impatient, just wondering how the progress is going

Djangoed

Great story. Keep it going.

Leo

The additions are goods. But I feel like something was wrong. Amber was very enthusiastic and liked Jack very much before the camera was on. After, on camera, she go back to "hate him". The transition was a bit weird I would say. I would say that I would love to see Amber corruption until she completly fall forJack. Of course she would still loves her husband but her growing love for Jack somehow make her hesitate wich one to choose...

SE

The additions definately added more flare

Larry

Goddamn that's so hot. Love the additions. Tremendous work.

SE

Man fuck, cant wait

Avid

Not completely noticeable, would read through them to definitely notice them. It’s two small scenes i added that’s mixed in there and some more details, etc that my editor Steve did. After reading the original and the new one i definitely noticed it but i was writing it so you might not if you skim through it. My main thing was the Monday scene felt rushed, so i added a little more to feel a little more context. Steve is suggesting i add a few more things i just wanted to get feedback on this version before i think about adding anything more. I want to move on and focus on the Stacey side story and chapter 6. Let me know if you guys notice the changes and what you think

Gonzo161996 .

Will we notice these changes easily?

Avid

Most of the changes were done on the last Monday scene. Let me know what you guys think. Might tweak some things here and there but this will be on literoica by the first of February. Now going to continue on the Stacey side story. I have so many good ideas for it i need to relax because it could literally be it’s own spin-off story. Also my new story Brooke’s discovery will be out on here after chapter 6. No date yet though for either but both will be ppv. Might drop some cool short stories to for free in the meantime for you guys. Just some ideas that’s been running through my mind. But i have a lot planned for you guys.