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🕑 Added 2022-03-07 07:24:55 +0000 UTC
Patreon Avatar #187 + Update
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ATENMARU

Yes, I agree. The Frantz events are taken out for now. It will be shown after the war. The Elven kingdom focus will also be consecutively realeased. Finally, we have worked on a map. Which will hopefully help us set the time and travelling more accurate. So we got these stuff in the bag. Thank you for pointing it out Luckyman. I am grateful the vision to make Gul better aligns.

LuMan

I have to say there are point in gul which can wait as aftermath. Such as the one where Frantz travels to the king castle. I also feel all the point in the elf village should all be in one set. Just until the elf king reveals that the village is under attack. From there it should be straight battles dealt in the village to reach a notable cliff hanger. That way you can coarse the story into them leaving the village to save the orcs From there everything should lead natrually to finale as the canvas version in last view chapters. With more panels added of course to make story flow more properly Beside that all I can say as a small critic is the time it takes for people to travel between kingdoms and villages. Because it means anybody with capable speed could reach a place in day. But also maybe the time of certain scenes is uncertain when reading it.

Yuudai

At least I tried

ATENMARU

That's a lot but it is too late to discuss this one. Grand scale wars will be later.

Yuudai

Also great job on the drawing

Yuudai

A minimum of 5k seems to be a safer bet

Yuudai

Well for starters a force of 300 demons is too small to be an army. A 1000 maybe but not 300.


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