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Chapter 54 - A Party to Remember II

🕑 Added 2024-09-02 16:00:13 +0000 UTC

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Neil Stevens

Got those fixed up. Glad you're enjoying Gregory and Malvia together! It's maybe not the most straightforward path that'll be taken, but I hope you'll enjoy the entire journey. I haven't read enough web serials to judge how they do romance myself. On the cabinets, the shape-changers weren't too fussed. The guards were dead before they went in, just the process of getting shoved in caused bone breaks and leaking blood.

gostsamo

oops. had a minor browser issue and thought that the first time the comment wasn't posted. sorry for the tautology

gostsamo

> Already, partygoers were either already in their own cliques > I moved back from the railing, only for Gregory to stay on the railing. both have tautologies; > being stared at with disgust by most of those attendance. _in_ attendance > I opened the doors of the cabinet. the paragraph has too many cabinets. also, if you really want to pack a body, cutting the joints is rather effective... said a friend.

gostsamo

I'm offly invested in the love story. Maybe because most web novels don't bother with building one properly or because this one rather fits the genre. > Already, partygoers were either already in their own cliques > I moved back from the railing, only for Gregory to stay on the railing. both above are tautologies; > being stared at with disgust by most of those attendance. in attendance > I opened the doors of the cabinet. the paragraph that follows has a few too many mentions of the cabinet. also, if you want to pack a body, breaking the joints is rather effective... said a friend.

Neil Stevens

Thanks, got that edited. And I'm also glad it was longer than usual because there was a lot I wrote here that I think was good. Just not sustainable if I made every chapter this length atm.

Tjolbin

Tftc. It did feel longer than usual, and im glad it was the only ones who’d told me those stories were either in a comE or in this ballroom, coma*


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