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Chapter 71 - Archive I

🕑 Added 2024-10-11 16:00:15 +0000 UTC

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Neil Stevens

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Neil Stevens

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gostsamo

> “And even if I had dedicated every waking moment to fufilling that promise, fulfilling > something that had me choking on my own bike every time I’d managed to get out that one is definitely funny > Interesting. Is that you main objection? your main > keeping a healthy distance. They likely detected the Imp, and even as small and incapable of complex thought as they were, they knew to keep their distance. keeping distance twice > An alchemical solution typically manages all of these issues. It solved the issues issues twice >Spare flesh and tissue was actually a thriving market, especially for people who wanted more tissue tissue twice > Only other bio-sculptors could do it, but the effects of your body trying to return to its baseline form without the required parts. missing end of sentence, likely something like "weere rather horrible" > the numbing effects of the Laudnum to kick in. I suppose, you mean laudanum here. The issue is, laudanum is a tincture of opium and alcohol, and is not very suitable for intravenous infusion. On the other hand, morphine was known since the early XIX century and is rather appropriate here. Also, an IV should be above the patient, so that gravity can work, but Malvia is shown to look in the mirror. Not very easy to move around with one of those. > I couldn't directly control their flow who are they here? the paragraph could be improved there. > a little faster….with that other work easily spasing > and the ‘profance nature of his new body’. ambivalent on the word. suppose, the local society would create one to nounify profane without reaching for profanity. > Honestly the only thing more disappointing about that novel Honestly, > so I didn’t enlarge too large in one part of my. too much? of my? body? Sculpting the flesh around my ears, forcing it to be rounded. > a few pointed teeth in my mouth, none with the same sharpness as my usual teeth. my hell given ones? > with a duke of hell….well I wouldn’t be alive, spacing > I unhooked the bag of Laundnum, laudanum

Neil Stevens

Yep! I didn't want to call out every feature, but I'll add a mention when I get to edits.

Tjolbin

Tftc I dont remember what its called, but she has double knees, right? Where they removed aswell? I’d been half-write. Half-right* I’d made a clean-cut, an escape until the current situation with Voltar, Clean-cut break*? something that had me choking on my own bike Bile* being spread around so I didn’t enlarge too large in one part of my. My body*?


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