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AnimeCon Harem 9: 9 pt 5

🕑 Added 2020-04-17 16:29:37 +0000 UTC

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The one downside about those wonderful bonus chapters (especially that last one) is that lines like these: ```I bet you anything that the moment we get back to the room, we’ll walk in on her making out with Emily.” “Hah, yeah right,” Brian snorted, shaking his head. “I don’t think Emmie swings that way...”``` - just don't fit with that expanded context, and him being worried about *not going easy on her* are especially weird if, rather than *fainting* from being fucked senseless, she got right back up and basically begged for more... though that can be somewhat addressed by ending it with her getting her mind blown even harder as the night explicitly ends. ... I can vaguely imagine how that could work, but it seems like it'd be hard to pull off right. But however well you manage that, Eighteen and Up has them being way too wanton to match up with this much shyness. Even that can be somewhat explained away by saying they were just way too amped up that night and are now feeling more normal. Still, if - and hopefully WHEN - you integrate the side chapters into the story proper, it'll take some reworking to make it all seamless.

honestly brianxsteph feels way more natural than stephxkelly


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