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AnimeCon Harem 10: Fade to Pink

🕑 Added 2020-08-07 14:44:38 +0000 UTC

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BS91

```the parts of him I can’t see are made up of boxes and angles and lines and there’s some kind of GEOMETRY to it!``` Kinda reminds me of a "Men's Brains vs Women's Brains" clip where the metaphor is that men compartmentalize every thing into its own box, and decompress by "going to their 'nothing box.'" Though, rather than thinking about nothing, it seems Brian needs to use his runs to try to sort things out into their proper boxes.... But I guess either he wasn't sorting properly, or he should've been throwing things out. Oh, hey! I don't suppose that had anything to do with choosing "Brian" for our protagonist's name? That "Brian" is an anagram of "Brain?"

Dastauf

what makes you think Kelly left? She's passed out on the bed beside them, right?

Dastauf

I LOVE your story and your writing. The conversations are perfect! I can absolutely hear each of them as I read: scatterbrained irrepressible Emily, resolute no nonsense Rebecca, hesitant but growing into effusive Steph, etc. Also, your use of metaphor is fantastic and adds so much to the depth of this story - enhances the description like great poetry. Thank you for your devotion to this work of art!

Dastauf

Need an appropriate verb here in place of "naked": "Then they simply *naked* in each other’s arms"

Amazing story.... followed since the beginning

HAPrime

Or more likely she recovered and they were so deep in Fuck that they never noticed her getting dressed and exiting. Kelly probably figured Brian wanted to be alone with Steph

Peccant

464 has admitted to the continuity error and he’ll fix it when he gets a chance. Or, if you prefer, she’s using charm magic to be in two places at once.

Trey McKnight

When did Kelly leave ?

HAPrime

Okay, it was a strange disconnect when the mind is all ... "High Concepts, Metaphors, Perfect Descriptors" and the body is all "D*ck More d*ck, Harder d*ck, MORE HARDER NOW D*CK". The chapter is an excellent part finale. And you jest about not leaving things on a cliffhanger, a revelation is almost worse because a cliffhanger will be immediately resolved when the next chapter starts. Who knows when we will get to deal with the ramifications of a revelation?

FortySixtyFour

Try to think of it as more of a psychedelic spirit animal journey then her thinking and deliberating these things, lol.

HAPrime

City is an interesting metaphor. I like the possibilities with it. The questions I would have is where in the dreamscape is it. Also, how is Stephanie able to think in metaphors while getting railed?

Roethan

I like the idea of him being an enclosed habitat, safe but empty. As the girls mesh with him (his soulscape, mind, whatever this represents) they will add their own elements and characteristics making it a true habitat. That will give them a home and a place to grow and learn more about their powers and themselves.

V01D

City is a good metaphor for something representing ‘Nexus’! Especially one that’s complex. Though, with all the girls being represented by Natural things, he might be put better as a Nature Preserve - with paths going through it and hidden depths. On the other hand, a city becomes more complex with each aspect added...


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