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Her Bound Heart Chapter 13.

🕑 Added 2023-06-03 01:00:10 +0000 UTC

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Erinnyes

Really great work on this one. I love the big shove in the right direction via setting off the wards. You set it up well and had me genuinely tense, and then the utter ridiculousness of the excuse was a beautiful subversion of the tension. Harry's ruthlessness in getting to Hermione was heart warming in retrospect there. Hermione's internal comment of how she'd rather kneel beside him than sit comfortably far away was just a lovely look into her mind right now, and you did an amazing job with the feelings throughout that exchange. It was so great to see their relationship move forward, and I thought you nailed it.

Matlef

Maybe you could have a scene where Harry doms Hermione, and Susan doms Daphne. Make it a bit of a fun competition with lower stakes, idk first one to cum loses and doesn't get a prize? Would still be Harry/Hermione but give a way to involve Susan/Daphne.

Matlef

I feel they give off some jealous vibes so i'm not sure if i can see them playing with others. While both of them have their insecurities, looking back at how Hermione acted when she met Susan, i think you would need to put in a lot of effort to show them becoming more confident and secure in each other before they would have someone join them. Loved the chapter, the future part was such fun, and the push wasn't what i was a bit worried it would be. And the hot, steamy, and honestly a bit adorkable fisting scene was great!


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