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Early Bird: The Edentide Garden Ch. 01 AND 02 (plus commentary)
🕑 Added 2021-01-21 17:23:07 +0000 UTCIn which a knight finds himself struggling with memory issues as he makes his way through a courtyard garden that has become strangely... corrupted. Luckily, he has a sweet, angelic little fairy bringing him back from the brink whenever he gives in, be it to a sultry moth-like succubus or a group of incredibly soft lamb's ear dryads.
[pov: 3rd person; cisboy; femdom; fnc (heavy brainwashing); edging; sleepy hypnosis; 69ing; gaslighting; honey; some drowning moments]
Oh, now this is a blast from the past. A long time ago, I began this story with the intention of making it a full novel—only to get caught up in other work and basically shelve it, unedited. Some of you might remember its first chapter was posted as one of the very first Vault exclusives. Well, I finally went back and did some editing and posted it! I felt like it was well past time.
Of course, that... does mean I kind of need to continue this story, huh?
Anyways, I hope you enjoy!
Author's Commentary (spoilers beyond!)
I wrote this a long time ago, as in, years ago. Editing it was tricky, because I can totally see these subtle kinks that have since bled into my work much more openly (and thus effectively): The gentle femdom, the oral fixations and deepening male degradation, the drugging and addiction, and even the lowkey infantilization.
My goal with The Edentide Garden (placeholder title "The Exquisite Garden", alt title "The Sunrise Blossom") was to effect this kind of dreamlike, wet dream feel to things. That's why Herne seems so incredibly thick-headed and gullible compared even to characters like Senya. It's why I play up his cock being constantly immersed in squishy nectar-filled clothes, why everything is so warm and soft, why he goes places without remembering his arrival or why he's doing it.
This was back when I was first exploring these kinks. A lot of my stories were literally inspired by my own dreams back then. I know this story was also inspired by bobsamade's long-defunct "The Garden of Hellish Delights", and you can no doubt see those influences.
It's... well, I don't know if it's very good! I didn't fully know how to write these kinks yet, and I wasn't even fully aware I was writing them. Editing was like trying to sharpen an old sword only to find out it was made from cheap bronze to begin with. I did my level best. I see what I was going for, and it kind of hurts seeing how close some of it came and knowing I just didn't have the skills at the time to make it there!
In the original third chapter, Herne originally escaped the Garden. I think I'm going to do something different. I like this period of him wandering the Garden, half-free-willed but confused and dreamy and endlessly horny, and I think drawing it out a bit would be fun.
My idea is to start running polls on the Patreon for it, and taking suggestions from $13+ patrons (though I also reserve the right to run my own ideas) for new challenges Herne can encounter.
Let me know your thoughts! Other stories are still on their way, I promise. I'm writing a mix of commission/obligation and "just things that are fun" to avoid burnout, and Edentide is definitely in the latter camp right now.
Comments
Latavia
I really enjoyed this one! The dreamlike quality definitely comes through and I find it really hot. I'm excited to see what you can do with this now with all of your new perspective!
Paul Clarke
Yeah, it's probably bad that I started trying to measure my eyes and googling how big hamsters get.
Lorelei
Yeah, don't look too close at that, I guess. ;P
Paul Clarke
Fun, though I did have a bit of a problem with a hamster-sized fairy with near human-sized eyes. I don't think they'd fit on her head!
Lorelei
I'm glad you're enjoying it! <3
Michael Skellig
Really great, especially the second chapter which was very slow and sensual. I can see Herne getting captured again and again by different spirits and plants in the garden. I suspect there is probably more to Lavvi than just an (not very) innocent fairy. I wonder if the tower/castle was Herne's home before it was taken over and the various creatures are either playing with him or slow feeding off his energy. Really looking forwards to future chapters, and hope you will always find your writing as fun to write as your readers find to read it.
Lorelei
Oh, gosh, thanks so much! That means a ton!
Zanni
This was a fun read. Honestly if there are any mistakes I didn’t notice as the story thoroughly engrossed me. Great job!
