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Lighting the Fires (Lay the Very Best - Chapter 126)

🕑 Added 2023-07-14 00:04:20 +0000 UTC

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Tsume Hexed

I'm back to be being super wet. wow. thanks you.

Premier

Fixed up! Thanks, I kept the Spicy part but reordered it as I like the Repetition but spaced it out just a little bit so it sounds less odd.

Serina Tsukaya

Corrections: kissing Brandy so firm it made her toes curl. kissing Brandy so firmly it made her toes curl. Why make this awfully complicated?" Why make this so awfully complicated?" Hot enough, she tried to shy away from it The swelling tip so hot, she tried to shy away from it just like Spitfire, was a towering just like Spitfire was a towering losing is no bad thing. losing is not a bad thing. Suggestions: Rewrite the following paragraph, it's too repetitive: Brandy liked spicy food and spicy ladies just as.... Didn't Calcine help put the necklace on Brandy? It went from Fenny to brandy not Scoria to Calcine no? Morgan said, looking at the fiery gem on the necklace nestled in Calcine's cleavage. What does this mean? Spitfire flicked her fire weather tongue at Calcine Consider replacing, original sentence has an odd flow Hot enough, she tried to shy away from it The swelling tip so hot, she tried to shy away from it Kinda confused here, how is that happening if she's being held up and only now leaning her down into her coiled tails: Her tail brushed over Brandy's legs as it writhed past


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