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fresh meat, page 56
🕑 Added 2020-01-10 06:59:41 +0000 UTCi'm uploading this as flats first because i woke up at like, 7 pm, which is usually when i'm supposed to already be almost done with flats and prepping to shade.
not much changed from the sketch to the final product, although the big middle panel there had some depth in the sketch.
this is probably THE oldest scene written for the comic aside from the first breakfast between the characters. obviously it's had a lot of revisions since then, but it's probably still more recognizable than the breakfast scene because the latter relied heavily on introducing the characters' personalities and issues succinctly, which needed to change drastically as the cast was switched out.
there was A LOT of continuity checking here -- which nurses were working when, who's rooming where and with whom, scar continuity, heights for characters who have never been show in the same room as each other, room numbers, etc. there will probably still be errors or quirks, but continuity checking is just damage control because comics are such massive projects. i noticed three separate small errors on other pages while continuity checking this one...
even then, some things were ultimately edited out entirely for continuity reasons. from memory, there were structures built into the wall to hold clipboards with info sheets about the patients (awesome protection of privacy there, retrospectively). they'd also have like, not joking here, flyers about experimental drug trials you could sign up for while there, etc. well, i had already drawn shots of the walls here, even ones that explicitly focus on them to show the signs for some reader recognition of important sites of the story. so they got edited out. this meant i had to retroactively make the wolf nurse (she is actually just a security guard, dark blue scrubs are people with no medical training who are just security) here hold the clipboard.
there's also supposed to be the med cart rolling around with the checker, and you get handed your morning meds after you're cleared, which also had a place she could have had the clipboard. there wasn't really narrative space to draw the cart pusher directly behind the wolf without significant effort i didn't have the energy or time for, so i just decided not every checker would have a companion cart pusher.
this page was also the one where i just had to go yes, the doors are wrong, they open inward which means you can easily barricade them from the inside, but it's fine, because you wouldn't be able to see anything if they look how they're supposed to from my memory. i made a continuity chart to explain to my wife how i generally make executive decisions like this:
i would consider the doors a lv. 3 error. i might make more in-depth commentary on continuity eventually, because even this chart doesn't account for, say, where a contradiction in space-time that doesn't happen immediately, in the same scene falls, because it's a more literal error, but it's technically a level 2 error definition and i might even treat it that way-- or, as another example, what qualifies as a literal continuity error, since we can say, none of these characters are 3d models that remain an exact level of "the same" across shots. if it's not a continuity error to draw kim with a different number of stray strands poking out of her hair in a different shot, where is the line?
but for now this chart explains the biggest gist.
some narrative continuity is that when the nurse who wakes up kim here was taking her to the new wing when she was transferred, she didn't have any paperwork in her hands, so that's why kim's body chart is missing. she's kind of a "rushy" individual.
this is also the first time we've seen tabitha's red bracelet in the story.
anyway, i think that's all i have to say for this one.
Comments
Noah Reynolds
Fwew. Finally caught up. One of the things I love most about your comic style is how you use the panel layouts. It is so deliberate and lyrical and really does a lot for the movement of the comic itself. It reminds me a little of how Chinese (? Korean? My boyfriend reads them, I dont quite remember what the original language is) webcomics use huge amounts of negative space to make their panels flow a certain way. Your method adds an incredible amount of movement and readability and there is a lot of attention to how your "shots" and "camera" angles are put together. A lot of two dimensional cinematography.
gray Folie
self-taught as in haven't had any formal training or mentoring, yeah. mainly i've done a lot of reading on shit out of fascination, particularly about animation & cartooning principles in my teens. i mentioned it in the stream where i was working on this, but i used to view comics as, basically, animation when your idea wasn't good enough to convince a crew of other people to help you make your story come to life. not really something i subscribe to anymore, ironically something i picked up from animation majors who draw webcomics as a hobby. i can't recommend a lot of books as a starting point because to be honest, i read a LOT of blogs during that period and a lot of them are gone now. anyway, i can do a continuity write-up sometime. funnily, 90% of the way i interact with continuity as a concept comes from film theory + tech issues. my wife has a special interest in film and was going to pursue a film major in college, she has a lot of trivia she talks about when she's reminded of it. the lengths they have to go through to keep some small details consistent are wild, it can be eye-opening.
Juno
I'm so immensely enjoying this comic, but more than anything I look forward to reading your page explanations and analysis afterwards. I've learned so much from them as an artist, and yes I would LOVE a post about continuity rules. I would like to know, are you self taught in comic work??
