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soft-pedaled, page 8

🕑 Added 2020-06-24 02:20:17 +0000 UTC
soft-pedaled, page 8
soft-pedaled, page 8

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hazel

i really enjoyed this one. this is such a rich with substance page. there's less going on in the izzi one, but it's a very drawn out switch. seems to me like that makes sense given that she is just getting worried. meanwhile felix alter struggle is explosive due to the trigger (one of many they've endured this entire ride), and there's a lot going on, emotionally and "physically" (in their struggle w the control panel). the page before this made "space" for all this action, with the silent panels, making for great pacing overall i like the route this is taking. i looked through the thumbs of the original draft, and while i think there were a lot of things to think about there, i genuinely prefer the deeper character development focus you are taking with the rewrite. it's awesome to see both versions though, thank you for that

sonny

poor malcom lol this happens all the time to me. "something is happening now, GO DEAL WITH IT INSTANTLY OR ELSE --"


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