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idletry september update #2
🕑 Added 2024-09-07 02:41:38 +0000 UTCthis is scene 4 of the comic. and some other stuff. i know it's probably a pain to read through these with a bunch of files in between the pages; the completed digital pages will be posted all together in separate posts, with a separate tag, to make reading through them easier... still thinking on the tag to be used just for reading.
randall is jessie's best friend from high school. she is "one of the guys" to him. he is someone who never spoke to her again after graduation to her.
the food is supposed to be chicken fried rice.
this is also the first scene with a curse word. i didn't notice until sketching scene 2 when changing "bull" to "bully sticks" -- both seem like a replacement for the word bullshit to be more PG. i thought it was funny because the comic's content is very, very much not PG.
i'm noticing that dutch angles are just sort of Happening as i draw and i'm kind of just letting them. i don't know how to feel about them yet, but they are at least not boring and artistically bankrupt.
i've also now lined and colored pages 1 and 2 of the comic. page 0, which is probably not going to have anything besides speech bubbles, is included so that you can read the three back to back. page 11, which was the first official color test, is included to show much of a limit on the palette there was on this page compared more to what i'm hoping for... it was the cleanest at the time, but i don't think it was a good page for showing off the color-changing palette.
i'm fairly happy with how the coloring h as turned out so far, though. the CMYK makes me terrified, but i'm trying not to think about it right now. the digital version can still have bright saturated colors.
the interactions in this scene came across WAY differently in text. in text, it wasn't even clear why this scene was in the comic. drawn out? it could not be more obvious that randall is here as a bait dog. the dialogue was ruder, everything kind of had to be smoothed over a little bit. i still think randall is a little too intolerable... it's hard to get across that they were friendly prior to this.
i changed the one bit of dialogue screenshotted to make it more ambiguous whether he was asking her to go check upstairs for a yearbook he'd come there to ask to see, or asking her to talk to jessie, who was upstairs at the time.
nonetheless, in my head, he came to their home to ask to see a yearbook to recall the last name of a different classmate he wanted to contact, but couldn't remember. he was also supposed to mention that jessie didn't show up to their 10-year class reunion, but i trimmed as much as i could from the scene.
this is now 39 pages of idletry, or 40 pages, if you count page 0, lol. it seems that the scenes are turning out to be about 10 pages long each pretty reliably, but i know without a doubt that this will change in acts 2 and 3.
