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Matabar. Book II. Chapter 2 - The Gardener

🕑 Added 2025-07-17 23:01:01 +0000 UTC

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Javek Redhand

Word choice issues. From the first paragraph “which allowed travelers to reach (did you mean to say journey or travel?) from the Empire’s capital to the central city of the country’s largest province in relative comfort and equally relative safety.” I won’t belabor the fact that the prose could use some polish, as you did in previous chapters.

John

Thanks!


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