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Matabar. Book II. Chapter 36 - The end of the Long Night

🕑 Added 2025-11-13 23:01:02 +0000 UTC

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Lena

Ehh, I don't think more than Milar

G

Excelent chapter and a great end to the arc. A couple of minor quibles below: 1) "If he failed to help Mshisty, then three more Cloaks would be joining the major on his trip to the Eternal Angels." 4 cloaks; Alexander, Din, Peralta, and Klementiy. 2) "The major’s body arched like a bow so violently that it seemed like his heels and wrists would tear apart." + "Mshisty beat his hands" Mshisty only has one wrist/hand/arm. 3) "passed his own staff to Milar and bent down to pick up Mshisty’s steel instrument" Ard has 2 hands why pass his staff to Milar? Have I missed lore regarding holding 2 staffs? 4) "Covering an area of no less than twenty square meters" should be "slightly less than" given the math for a 2.5m diameter circle. Assuming you meant that the seal encompassed all those healed. Some re-wording needed. Again great story telling.

topley

“Maybe… a friend?” Oh fuck off Ard, Arkar is probably your realest friend in the entire city. Even more than Millar I’d argue. Great chapter as always.


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