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Villain: TPOD, Chapter 349

🕑 Added 2023-03-12 20:40:29 +0000 UTC

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Симеон Полигорски

Noooooooo I've catched up😵‍💫 NOW I DEMAND 300 more chapters by tomorrow morning or I will detonate the Sun.

Dogan

(I'll just post the ones I noticed here so the comment section doesn't get cluttered) - whilst the other interstellar listened to what they had to share. (interstellar > interestedly ? personally I'd go with "the others intently listened" or something.) - and eventually, red streaks of lighting started flashing (lighting > lightning) - All of a sudden, the red streaks of lighting around his body (lighting > lightning) - and the Portal in the sky started slowly started closing. (started slowly started > slowly started closing) - So, those red streaks of lighting also protect the subject? (lighting > lightning) - and Kiara was heartily lagging as she read the letter (heartily lagging > heartily laughing) - Well will come back here some other time. (Well will > We will) - and his heavy skipped a beat in fear. (his heavy skipped > his heart skipped) - as much as I want to deny it, a part of him does yearn to (a part of him > a part of me) - the Spatial Force will shatter your body into immense pieces (immense pieces ? maybe tiny pieces instead? idk how the spatial force rolls though) Edit: ... I thought it'd collapse or something on desktop, but it only does on mobile.

S

TFTC :) "chuckled at then stood" at = and "returned to the Mansion to the Mansion" repeated text "girls listed to his words" listened "thrashers" threatened "When it call ended" all


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