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Chapter 469

🕑 Added 2019-06-02 21:57:27 +0000 UTC

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Thenais

A bit of a let down, as previous chapters were all building hype for a rage mode Mila, but all we get is some light sister-wives bonding :'( Nice nethertheless.

Malcolm Tent

I dont think Mila was portrayed badly at all. Seeing as she was the only person who noticed the specters influence and shook it off. That's a major coup after such a terrible few....years.

I think it is fine brother, It keeps well within Mila's character, I think. It is exactly how I thought she would react. She is a dichotomy of both strong and weak. Ready to face an army of bloodthirsty monsters, but struggles against her own shortcomings.

Meschmee

I thought it was a good chapter. If you are worried about how it paints Mila then I only thing I can recommend is to sandwich negative narratives with positive like when giving people feedback. I like how she was able to work out for herself that this is an important character building moment of her life. As for her internal thoughts we all go through a roller coaster of emotions, especially as teens. Nothing wrong with mourning the person he was and still loving the person he is.

ThePolarParadox

Pfft. You kidding? He'll be at the door to offer her Spiritual Herb tea by the pot. Some Spiritual Herb lotion for her minor travel bruises. Some Spiritual Herb kindling to light her hearth. And don't forget some giant Spiritual Herb leaves to fan her if things get too hot.

Arnon Parenti

Going back to the citadel to find Rain's new obsession is turtle poop and farming will not be the most glorious moment in Sumila's life

it's good man, I don't know what more you wanted from it. it really feels like we are catching up with everyone at the beginning of this new arc or volume or w/e.

ThePolarParadox

As for fleshing things out, maybe add in dialogue from Alsantset and Tursinai? They just feel like extras here. Though I dunno what you could replace to avoid exceeding the standard 3k words any more than has been done.

ThePolarParadox

Thanks for the chappy, Ruffo.


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