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Chapter 451

🕑 Added 2019-04-19 02:07:58 +0000 UTC

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Thundermike00

How many divinities do 'the people' have?sadly they won't hopefully listen to her advice and get wiped out in the process

Yarp, i was like "I did all that set up just for zian to be a bystander? nonono."

Yea, conscious decision. Less angry more annoyed is what I went for.

NeWorlDark

I like this more than the previous version, more focused on Zian and Boshui's conflicts and they actually had a bit of a discussion with the patriarchs before the Tyrant showed up.

ThePolarParadox

Barring help with his NP, the last real sessions I can recall were the ones before the Contest.

CentaureHeart

It's frustrating that Baatar is never Mentoring Rain anymore.. I hope we can see them again soon. Also hoping that the Society still tries something, it would give the Bekhai an excuse to finally wipe them out and would maybe make the higher backing behind them come out of the woods, which is the goal of the Legate..

JpewwNpg

i think the previous version showed her a lot more animated(pissed).

Is memed now

I rewrote the actual meeting to show more interaction between zian bobo and the rest. not a huge amount, since the chs now at 4800 words, but better than before.

Honestly, I felt like there were missed opportunities here (not talking about PR). I know narrative junkies want the plot running at full steam and get annoyed at any diversion off our main boy Rain, but it felt like there were opportunities missed with OG foil, Zain. I admit I’m a Tolstoy fan, which means I love stories with wide, developed casts, so I would have loved to see BoShui, Zain, and Jing Fei meeting. We could have had any interaction with someone before Yuhuan. We could have gotten more on the oddity of OuYang running this. I’m not suggesting you to include anything in particular, just this scene is wonderfully set up for depth and I feels it falls flat. “When you think you’re stepping into a lake, and find it’s a puddle.”

MEME thoughts: something like this: <a href="https://images.app.goo.gl/hr5aNTNcQjMqtyWW6" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://images.app.goo.gl/hr5aNTNcQjMqtyWW6</a> But clearly adjusted for Zain. Or something along the lines of “when you realize how much more baller your auntie is than you.”

<a href="https://ruffwriterblog.wordpress.com/savage-divinity-cast-list/" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://ruffwriterblog.wordpress.com/savage-divinity-cast-list/</a>

Arnon Parenti

I think that's the point, they don't want to be roaches on some barbarians' footsole, they most certainly don't want others to think they can just kill society young patriarchs and get away with it.

Malcolm Tent

These Society guys are almost too stupid to live. Akanai would have straight up butchered them if they had managed to hurt Rain. Which assumes they got past his whole retinue and possibly Guard Leadee, Guan Suo, Lei Gong, and whatever other hidden experts he happens to have at any given day. And that's not even taking into account what the Abbot would do to them for killing his new poster boy, because the Monk was supposedly the closest thing a human being can get to divinity and the Abbot was his BOSS. Seriously, the Uniter and his scary defiled army are on thing but the society are cockroaches to Rain and company.

Destruct180

Ruffwriter can you make a glossary for all the characters? if possible.

Arnon Parenti

My bet is on one of Luo Luo's suitors, either prime minister or grand general, I don't think anyone else could go against the legate's support

ThePolarParadox

No it doesn't. 'Lucky...' is sort of a shortened version of 'So lucky...'

ThePolarParadox

Dammit, Tyrant! Your big bro was gonna tell us who the imp backing them was!

Arnon Parenti

After Guan Suo, Lei Gong and Gang Shu are done playing with their bones the tyrant will turn them to pretty ornaments for Rain's funeral

I feel it needs a question mark at the end lol "lucky...?"

Arnon Parenti

This was such a great slap, I hope the tyrant has a place in her heart for Fei as a disciple so we see more of her attitude in the future.

JpewwNpg

no memes? losing your touch?


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