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Chapter 566 v2.0

🕑 Added 2020-03-23 17:38:15 +0000 UTC

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ThePolarParadox

eh hes probably trying to build up a relation to the peeps who could take sense into Rain if he goes murderhoboey. Zian, BoShui, Fung and maybe even Huu since he’s Bekhai.

I liked both. You could like before, make a 2 chapter post.

It does feel more complete, but i like the dark attitude in the first writting, we could feel the negative emotions as the scene is described, in this one the way you worded it made it rather light... as for the Nian-zu part it s is spot on but if you add it into the other chapter i feel it has more weight.

ParadoxMike

I like this version. It feels more complete to me

lala jhones

Yep its a lot better, especially with Nian-Zu. It honestly looks a little less certain where his allegiance lays now. We knew he was worried about the bakhai rebellion, isn't appreciating Rain's disrespect as time goes on, and is probably hurt by yazhen's indifference. Who knows whats going on with him lol

ThePolarParadox

Nice chonky chapter. Many thanks, so wow.


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