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Chapter 729

🕑 Added 2021-08-10 23:49:04 +0000 UTC

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Carter

I actually liked this version a lot more. There was more detail and I think it added weight to everything.

Hey less dark. More good. Still in character. 10000001/10

yes. he gonna be sharing with lotta ppl anyways, considering it'd be difficult to hide the fact that he not slaughtering millions of rescued civs

CentaureHeart

Kinda miffed that Da'in completely sided with Shuai Jiao, I mean she's Du Min Gyu god daughter, shouldn't she trust his judgment more?

Gjim

Dang thats some rising tension.

Manu Sniter

Strongly agree, that part in the first version was more intense and purposeful I literally felt my heart speed up, now it feels like more of a slog, like who cares about Siyars weapon, stuff like that completly destroys the pacing. Good that heat least phrased out how he would deal with the defiled. I wish the implied threat would have stayed instead trying to guilt him.

Thenais

i prefered the previous chapter much better (for the first part of Rain/Shuai Jiao discussion) no long dialogs which makes Rain pass for a fool, just short questions and quicks acts, which are all the more threatening. It was elegant and minimalist. Shuai Jiao is risking his life, and he feels it more in the first version than in this one.

RuRo

Haha. I see, Ruff has decided to further cultivate the Profound True Big Dick energy. Good choice.

Andrew

Thank you!

Diplodicus

Nice chapter Ruff, Definitely think it's an improvement and it provides a lot more context and background for Shuai Jiao. Really curious about his dark secret now

Arnon Parenti

The problem I have with this rendition is a lack in external stimuli for Rain's deflation, the whole chapter feels like a temper tantrum of a spoiled child and then suddenly he is gone and smart Rain comes in. But no internal or external signal as to where smart Rain comes from, if anything Shuai Jiao should suspect this as a Zhen Shi plot twice over. You could make it that when Pong Pong drops concealment someone panics enough to create a heart demon, at which point Shuai Jiao shows he can instinctively feel a tea drinker and Rain Devours which calms him down and Rain gets why he has to tell the whole truth. Or any other external or internal something that won't make it seem like when Rain in abandoned by his allies including his own sub commander he just makes up some mystical ploy that makes all his madness dissappear.

BStew

So was rain speaking out loud for all to hear during his explanation

Yea, I never know either. Even 700+ chs in, I still don't know.

Zarik0

I dont know what to say about this "rewrite" Some part/point are better and some are less good in my opinion (some "past problem" are "solved" in a more satifisfactory way but some new appear), so in global average nothing changed? Except we get a little more long chapter in the end, and like Geminus say we feel a little more "weight" in the event because the chapter have more word detailing it so we take more time thinking and reading about it, but its minimal vs the old in my view, so its good? I dont know man ;P

Geminus

Really feeling the weight of the event with the added changes. Great stuff.


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