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Chapter 746 unedited unmemed

🕑 Added 2021-10-29 00:07:21 +0000 UTC

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The desert Defiled were from the west, with human leather headwraps and super dry skin lol. The south is jungle and always has been. I haven't gone super deep into desert culture mostly because I dont know much about desert cultures. Aside from camels and sand, i dont really know what else to throw in.

Thenais

great chapter !

Zarik0

Something is bothered me about how you describe the West as mostly a desert in this chapter (i was thinking it was just a "little" part who is close to the middle sea who is desert) but you describe as its everywhere in the West Province and we dont get the feeling the custom of people and how you described the people of the west in the past as a desert people at all (was feeling more like a "normal" place with forest and plaine maybe a little more tundra/mongolia feeling with not much tree and less humidity/water because you said they have some difficulty for agriculture but not a desert sand territory everywhere at all), was is not more the South province who is full desert type (with oasis and etc i guess)? who have desert Defiled type ennemy and custom and clothe similar to our world desert people (arab)? That bother me here suddenly and its seem strange (seem a little inconsistency here on how are people and how their territory is, atleast with what you disclosed on them and the province in the past), so two of the province are "full" sand dune desert? mmmm I like it a lot if you can repost/link some of the map you posted way way back then, and maybe scribble fast a general one (atleast in the area of conflit with some detail of the area because i will like to get a good picture of it so the descriptif you do/use is clear and have support behind in our brain we can see) Yeah i know i maybe just throw a rock in your inertia of writing/thinking about the story you begin to have here, just starting to rego at it in a good space, and it add a lot of work to you to do it if you go at it in the end, sry :P but i really think it can be a big plus for the story to have this Ps; this chapter is really good, i get some water in the eye whith Jorani talk with the monks ;)

Thanks, fixed

you right, you right. Thnx

Uryah Taylor

It says that Fung fought Mitsue Juichi when I think it should be Hideo?

Diplodicus

Thanks for the chapter Ruff! The chapter made sense and the pacing feels good

Senio Holland

Also, great chapter Ruff! Usually takes a few to get back into it, but you're coming in swinging :)

Senio Holland

"and while Jorani had faith in both the bossman’s decision and the Lieutenant General’s abilities, it was always when faith was backed by cold hard facts." -- It was always "preferable?" .. when faith..

Allastin

He can be real swell when he wants to

Arnon Parenti

Jorani Saviour of the West, has a nice ring to it.

Arnon Parenti

Thanks for the chapter, it was a good transition for the next piece of action.

Stockmar

That was a interesting tale. And also i get the feeling Rain told them something similar. But perhaps they needed Jorani to break it down for them

Gjim

Am I first comment? Anywhose I dig Jorani being a motivational speaker.


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