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Chapter 1 Reignited WIP Full
🕑 Added 2024-05-27 22:01:22 +0000 UTCHappy Memorial Day everyone! So here's the full comic. Now some of you might be asking, why not just post the final 16 pages like said before? While I was finishing them up, I realized that there were some loose ends in the story that I had to tweak. Some which required me to redraw or completely re-frame a scene or dialogue.
for those that don't want to go through the entire thing to see what's changed, here are the scenes I've changed. Although I do recommend going through the whole thing since I've changed dialogue here and there. But here are the big things that are new;
+New Prologue that I thought was more befitting for the chapter the story's lore as a whole.
- Removed Ray and Liz being at the cafe surveilling Randell, the Boar.
+ Replaced by taking the 2 back to the original draft of the script. Which may seem very familiar to some of you who've remember the original scene with Ray and Liz at their apartment. I did this because I felt like Ray's goals weren't unified and it made a new character briefly very important in the 2nd act. So I figured it was better to bring Randel back to being a random Meta and keeping Ray's goals focused on Morales from the very beginning.
+/- I replaced Morales just having a stroll with his Metas to having a press conference. Originally, it seemed random and pointless so have an objective for both Morales and Ray makes that chapter more cohesive for me.
+/- Changed Liz's stance on Ray going out to fight Halberd. This change was actually inspired by a facetious comment by a user here named Gally who joked about Liz encouraging her brother to put himself in danger lol. The truth is, this has bothered me since the original, but I've avoided changing this because I wanted 2 characters to be on different sides. But I realized that Jak is the one that's on the other side, so now I got a much better scene where Liz is more in character. This also lead to changing some of Liz's dialogue in previous scenes.
And the rest of the comic, you guys did not see yet so enjoy!
As I said on twitter, I am very pleased with the end result, I did so many rewriting and drawing since last year just to make sure everything is just right and I think I got something that's pretty solid. I really enjoy sharing my thought process with you guys. I do in part to also help inspiring writers so they don't have the same issues.
I plan to get inking very soon after I do 1 or 2 test comics to figure out how Im going to render this comic. Hopefully it only takes me a little over a month to finish. because I'm ready to move on to Chapter 2 and 3 and I believe those chapters won't take me nearly as long.
Once again, Enjoy!
Comments
FurFist
Impressive to read the first chapter. Had to read between this script and the other. Loved how the fight with Halberd was more intense. I also loved how Ray's identity was easily discovered compared to the previous version, probably from watching the damaged mask. I love how Liz is acting more like a mother and big sister mixture. It's sweet of her to cheer him up, support him, and heal him. Kind of surprised she used to clean his bottom when they were younger, lol. And I love how Liev has a harem of lionesses to do his bidding. Was happy to see Ruby and Amber in action. Are the other lionesses going to take a part on the story or they are just meant to show how many females follow him? Either way, I am so happy with this new start. I look forward to seeing the next reboot chapters in the future.
Gally
There goes my afternoon
