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It's a Christmas Miracle! (Invasion of the Bawdy Snatchers)
🕑 Added 2019-12-26 03:49:41 +0000 UTCThe holidays have been, as per usual, a hectic time, filled with the wonderful exhaustion that only family can bring. I managed to get all my shopping done, but unfortunately I haven't had the time to do much writing lately. Fortunately, I had the foresight to write a few stories ahead of time!
This one is all about a group of goblins and their nefarious attempts to gain husbands. Given that I'm an incorrigible nerd, the inspiration here is when a boss fight more revolves around a bunch of little enemies that happen to be buffed by the boss. None of them are particularly dangerous, but they can be overwhelming in a group. You could consider the main villain here the "goblin lord," though she's more accurately a goblin lady.
Well, they're not called "ladies" in MtG. But this isn't a story from MtG, so it's a moot point.
I feel like a specific part of this story didn't quite land, but hopefully you'll disagree! Either way, I hope you all enjoy the story, and I hope you had a wonderful holiday season!
Comments
Matthew Lindquist
Ah! I can understand where you're coming from, though to my eyes you nailed it; the twist perfectly reveals that he had been compromised all along, and that his missing day and a half had a great deal of programming for him, taught and trained to not see the Goblin Queen right in front of him. And it raised exciting questions too, hence my headcanon!
Carol J.
The twist that the other "inquisitor" was a goblin all along. I tried to add some subtle foreshadowing, but I worry it was either too subtle or not enough. Of course, you enjoying the story far outweighs anything else I'm concerned with!
Matthew Lindquist
I had as my headcanon that she snuck in, bamboozled the real chief and took her place, and the former lady inquisitor is now scrubbing the floor, hypno'ed into thinking she's Morrigan's scullery maid, and kept that way by an implanted humiliation kink which keeps her a quivering, pleasure-looped, degradation-craving mess ;)
Matthew Lindquist
If you don't mind my asking; what part of the story did you think wasn't landing properly? I think it's amazing!!
Carol J.
The idea was that she snuck in while he was gone, but I kinda like the idea that she's been a deep agent for longer than that!
Lorelei
Finished! So, I'm curious—was the chief always a goblin, as is sorta implied, or was she replaced while he was gone?
Lorelei
I am halfway through, and it is very, very good.
ASkillings
Wonderful as always. Happy holidays. I don’t know how but every one of your stories are S tier for me.
