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68- Arsenal Of Light

🕑 Added 2025-08-28 18:14:36 +0000 UTC

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Demolition D

I love the Tree, the daisies and the devoured. Chapter was amazing! I do kinda with the Nightmare conductors and (very unlikely) the giant Frogs made an appearance. They did make it out easy though. If the vines and smelter moss had been dropped near them that would have been bad. 🤔 since some plants sprout after wild fires, maybe he could make something terrify that does that and kinda of partners with the moss.😶😶😶(maybe the daisies??)

Austin Gibbs

Foolish Arthur Vrax has the high ground.

jollybane

Thank you sir will editing pass with these when im at a computer next :D

Daniel C Williams

Editing suggestions: descending from the sky above cooing gags echoing from them ->descending from the sky above, cooing gags echoing from them “An angel Rembrand has sent us an angel!” ->“An angel! Rembrand has sent us an angel!” Carver dashed to her potion in hand ->Carver dashed to her, potion in hand street behind them. At an oncoming tide of Daisys, dozens of them flung themselves ->street behind them at an oncoming tide of Daisies. Dozens of them flung themselves pure white flame reducing flora and fauna ->pure white flame, reducing flora and fauna Arthur Saw the troll’s horrifically ->Arthur saw the troll’s horrifically but the man simply walked into the icy mist lost forever from sight. ->but the man simply walked into the icy mist, lost forever from sight. Calmly watching as his minions savaged the brave men of god below him ->Calmly watching as his minions savaged the brave men of faith below him The last one isn't a grammatical error or anything like that. It's just a suggestion because there are multiple gods in this world, so 'men of god' sounds weird and off. Also, just in case it seems like there's a ton of errors, I had to reread multiple times to find all this stuff, and I was trying to be vigilant about it, because I think that the neater the writing is, the wider the audience it will reach. Your writing has gotten a *lot* neater since the early chapters, and it shows :)


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