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GOAL UPDATE #1: The Furry (not) Short (enough)
🕑 Added 2018-07-24 03:59:03 +0000 UTC Yo, Patrons! This post is for your eyes only, because, as you are and remain the beating heart of this endeavor, we need YOUR help honing one of our two potential Festival Shorts into fighting shape.This is the wildly embellished true story of Mike's childhood, specifically the part where his Dad came out as gay and a furry at the same time. It already exists as a complete, finished screenplay at an Industry-standard 110 pages. However, if we're ever going to get the feature made, a great first step is to film a 15-20 MINUTE short film version of the tale to get the attention of investors.
The script linked to above is the first draft of that short. It's a hefty 43 pages. While 43 is significantly less than 110, anyone who knows about time/numbers can probably guess our short version of the script needs to clock in at...I don't know, but much less than 43 pages. So we're asking The Beans:
What can we cut?
Was this funny and/or enlightening? Was it ever confusing or hard to follow?
Does this suck ass (in the bad way) and we should abandon it entirely?
All other feedback most welcomed, of course. We make stuff for you, we want to make bigger stuff for you, and we want you to be a part of that development process. Try this one on for size if you have the time, and if we use your feedback, expect a Special Thanks in the credits!
NOTE: This script is Copyrighted and Registered with the WGA, so no stealing it. We're looking at you, Paul Thomas Anderson.
Comments
Sorry this is so late, I meant to add something sooner but things just kept coming up. I'm not sure how helpful this will be, but here are my thoughts on it. I think your strongest scene is the one at the furry convention where they are asking everyone questions and it cuts from Ahmed filimng to their reactions etc. I fealt like that has the most impact to me and it fealt very real. I would focus more on those scenes and what follows than the ones before it which, while great for a feature, might not be the best suited pacing wise for a short festival film. Overall nicely done, it was entertaining and very illuminating about a subject I knew very little.
This would make either a great short-film if you can find the right actors/actresses of the right age-ranges, or a great cartoon.
