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The Furry Movie - A Small Beans Screenplay
🕑 Added 2021-08-04 16:53:32 +0000 UTCNow that we've reached the point in our Movie Diary series where the script is done, here's the done script. Our next Furry Movie meeting will be all about the wonderful feedback we've received from friends and industry readers, and we'd love to discuss your impressions as well!
Feel free to drop comments or thoughts on this post, as annotations on the script itself, or in the Movie Diary channel of the Small Beans Discord. And if you really wanna get nasty, here's a link to the spreadsheet we used to reconstruct the movie from our previous draft. On the left you can see the movie as it was, on the right is the script it became.
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Comments
Taylor Carriage
Great script, fun concept, well rounded 3 dimensional main characters. Only have one character to complain about as I'm reading this: Hank. I hope no adult man is that oblivious to the fact that throwing their teenaged kid head first into the deep end of their furry life straight away like that wouldn't cause some confusion, embarrassment and probably anger. But then again, maybe he's just a bit oblivious in general to stuff like that? Not saying he's badly written, I think making him annoyingly oblivious is helps the premise. Just wanted to complain about him a bit 😅 Curious about what happened with the bully Brandon (did they save him by scaring off the other people in the country club or something? Why was he nice about the car at the end? Was he at the furry con or something?) Maybe I missed the explanation cause I was reading this while high. Anyway, looking forward to seeing this project progress ❤ T
Oli
A more serious point, and I bet this is something you've considered, between scenes 27 and 31 there are a lot of moments involving text on a screen. Facebook stalking, email writing, text messaging, google map using etc. As pointed out by Ganz in a recent DPT (iirc) that can be a tricky thing to make work, although it's a bit easier to be stylistic with it in a comedy, and too much of it in a short space of time might be problematic.
Oli
In an early flashback scene you have Trey playing pokemon on an old school gameboy and he shows off a Charmeleon he has just caught, but Charmeleon is the evolved form of Charmander, one of the three starter pokemon, and cannot be "caught". Literally unwatchable ;-)
Shawn Parks
I don't know if I CAN provide useful feedback, but I hope to try.
Cody Franks
Damn it guys. I had stuff to do today! Instead it looks like I'll be reading this script.
Ellen Swaim
We’re not going to see your script stolen and renamed “Force of Nature 2,” are we?
John Krane
I am torn between wanting to read this and wanting to wait for the film. I trust you guys implicitly and I certainly couldn't provide useful criticism. I did scan to a random page to see the text: "Look, just because something's inherently hilarious doesn't mean that I can't be super-sensitive about it." Seems like a great thesis for this.
