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Guilty x Creatures : Dark Elf Arc : Chapter 31
🕑 Added 2021-10-01 11:17:25 +0000 UTC Chapter 31 : Early Afternoon
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Glad to hear you're enjoying the story, my friend. And thank you for the critiques, I totally agree as well. I've become far more mindful of my punctuation and have been reeling things in with the exclamation points especially, lol
Really digging it so far. Just have some minor hangups with the writing: You’re too liberal with exclamation points. I get the cutesy vibe it gives your characters, but verbs like mumbling and grumbling don’t match that punctuation. Also, ‘stoic’ is an overly specific term that doesn’t suit the situations its used in. Try using some broader similes instead.
