CollaredKid
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I Need Your Help (also her's a story)
🕑 Added 2019-01-15 16:30:01 +0000 UTCThis is a bit of an emergency post. I need to get rid of this creative anxiety. I'm suffering from constant fear that I'm making a story you guys wont like. And the closer we get to the patreon goal the more my stomach drops.
This is what I have. I plan on making about 4 (or more) different scenarios connected by a THIN plot. Each part will have a picture and all that noise. I have started and stopped so many fucking times because I keep second guessing myself. So I need you to tell me what's up. This here is a random snippet. I myself don't even know where this is going to fall but it's for sure going to be it. Like... do you like this? Am I on the right track? I know there isn't a lot to gleam from whats presented but I just need to know if you like what's there so far? I just want to make sure you guys are getting something WORTH this wait and something that shows my appreciation for the goal itself.
The plot as it stands right now is a character's ticklish secret is revealed and things get messy FAST. Will that remain the plot? Who knows. CleARLY I DONT ANYMORE!
With that being said enjoy. No pressure :) *twitch twitch*
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“MMFMFMFMFNFNFMFMMMFMMMMFMFFMFMFMM!!!”
Lee laughed as his fit body flailed on the bed from the tickling he was forced to endure. He was helpless, just as his captors wanted. The two of them sat at the end of his bed, both with one of his feet in their grasp as they lightly and teasingly tickled and scratched them.
Lee had no idea who they were. They wore grey hoods and long scarves over their mouths, effectively keeping their identity secret. They’d woke him up just like this, their fingers dancing on his helpless souls. Gagging him so Lee’s laughter wouldn’t wake up the entire neighborhood.
“You can’t be asking us to stop, right? Really?? That’s just cruel! It’s only been like 15 minutes and we’re only lightly teasing you. Come on pretty boy, you can hold out for us! Hahaha keep that foot still.”
“He’s SOOOOOO ticklish! I’m barley even touching him and he’s basically coming apart! And look at these sexy little feet! Tickle tickle tickle tickle!”
The one on the left started to quickly flutter his soft fingertips in the pale center of Lee’s foot. Much to the ticklish young man’s dismay, that was his worse spot.
“MMFMFMFMFMFNFMFMFMFMFMFMFFMFMFMFNFNFNFFF”
Lee busted out in renewed intense laughter as the unidentifiable tickler worked their wicked magic. Their fingers digging in deeply at the center of his foot and shooting sensations all throughout his body.
“Ok, that’s cute as fuck. I’m doing the other foot. Get ready.~”
The second hooded tickler got into position, but not before taunting their victim by wiggling their black gloves fingers in his face.
Lee looked deep into them, this fingers were heading right to his foot and once they started he feared they wouldn’t stop. There was nothing he could do but lay there and wait for the sensations to take him, and when it did it took him HARD.
“Oh yea he’s REALLY flailing now! Laugh for us baby!” The one on the right exclaimed.
“You should really be more careful with who finds out how ticklish you are. Epically when you’re THIS cute. Kinda makes you a target.~” The left one advises as they dug their fingers even harder into his centers.
Lee’s face went completely red as the off hand complements couldn’t help but make him blush. If there was two thinks the young man tried to keep secret about himself it was his lack of self-confidence and his “sensitive side”. Right now though both attributes were on full display for his naughty midnight visitors as he laughed ever so helplessly.
“Wow! Look at that thing standing tall over there! Someone must really like our tickles.” The hooded tormentor on the left stopped his teasing when they noticed just how shamelessly hard their victim was.
“Oh wow!” The other on the right turn to see for themselves. “No doubt... bet you it’s as ticklish as his feet...”
Lee’s eyes went wide when he heard that, going wider still when he heard the others response.
“Only one way to find out! Deep breaths there handsome. You might feel a slight tickle.~”
Lee could feel his stomach drop while both figured crawled closer to his most sensitive area, fingers tauntingly wiggling as they drew nearer....nearer...
“Coochi coochi coo”
Comments
Thank you a lot. I’ll try to take the pressure off.
MeleeDuck
Don't worry so much everything you put out is great
Thanks so much! And trust me I’m hearing all the demands for Kid and I plan to start using him more. Also don’t sweat it! English is my native language and I can’t spell for shit ;p
Florian Anonym
I know everbody told you already but basically we like everything that you put out bc it is always good. I love the teasing in this story. I love that its a boy getting tickled bc there isnt enough f/m or m/m stuff out there. And i love the characters you have bc its not just guy A getting tickled by guy B bc he is ticklish. You have a story to your characters which i absolutaly adore. The only thing i could say is i would love more kid stuff. Maybe even a two part story where he gets tickled and gets his revenge. Anyways keep doing what you do bc it is great. PS: Sorry for the long comment and bad english. Its not my native language :)
That’s for the critique! Everything you mentioned will be coming up. I’m not promising you all Les Misérables, but I’ll add as much context as I need. Seeing these reactions have for sure given me renewed confidence in the idea. :)
TheDeathEcchi
It’s a wonderful snippet indeed! The idea is excellent and has a lot of potential for delicious shenanigans. But, if you’re accepting constructive criticism (if not, disregard the following), it might do well to focus on the background of the story. How is his secret exposed, by whom? Who uses such information to their advantage besides these two devils? How is the main character gonna handle it? If you work more on that, really flesh things out narrative-wise, this story can become absolutely incredible. You’ve got the mad skills; take a breather, look over the story, find out what there is to really make it pop and draw the reader in and get them hot. If you’ve got other stuff to share from it, would love to see it and provide insight~😊👍🏾 Wishing you luck and success with the story~!
I appreciate that. However I don’t want that to mean I always get a free pass. I never want my head to get too big or feel like “I always know what’s best” If there was anything 2018 taught me is it doesn’t matter who you are or what you own; your still capable of making stupid, tone def decisions, and I don’t want to do that.
Thank you very much. That means a great deal to me
I'll love anything you post ❤❤❤
Marvin10101984
Dude, you are a brilliant writer and artist. You work is always amazing and that is why people are here.
