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14 — Orange Juice

🕑 Added 2024-04-07 00:04:13 +0000 UTC

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The beginning was kinda confusing. Why was he freaking out so badly?

Mariposa

I'm slightly confused by what he thinks is so wrong at the beginning of the chapter. Was it the opulence of the gathering hub? Or that so many of the Immortals were there? I think the chapter might also benefit from a clear distinction between what he's remembering versus what's happening now. Other than that I also really enjoyed reading this chapter. I like seeing all these different races.

LSmurfyL

Doot!

nome cognome

I keep thinking that moody is camilla. It would certainly create an interesting situation.

Deinos

Awesome chap! Can't wait to read the next

Gopard

Thanks for the chapter! Really liked this one! The way past memories and information about the rankers is brought up felt amazing same with the almost casual interactions but still full of the hidden tension that Alex knows the danger he is constantly in... And I loved that last line from the Guide! I was waiting for someone to realize Alex acting as "inconspicuous as possible" is actually pretty damn suspicious in itself!

Touch

The chapter is soo good, I was confused a bit when he goes into the lobby with sand and waves, but after the chapter ended it all clicked together

Elessar Beverly

Glad you liked it :) Alex can be very mental sometimes (however you want to interpret that)

Elessar Beverly

Yes!! It might just be that I'm coming off the writing high, but in terms of craft I totally agree! I really never done so much writing/revision as I have in this past month and it feels like I've learned a lot from it. Here's to hoping the next ones are even better!

Elessar Beverly

Thank you! Though if I'm 3rd then its much too early to say. (I have all the intention of beating them hehe)

Ihsan Gunay

This was the best chapter yet in terms of writing.

James Faulkner

So good, Tftc!

Prismarinium

Thank you for the chapter!

Dashaya Toney

God I fucking love this chapter, and story in general. It's super early but this might end up being in my top 3 web serials of all time behind Double-Blind and Worm

Nightslxy

That was a mental chapter. Amazing, though.


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