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35 — Lost Souls

🕑 Added 2025-05-22 12:33:51 +0000 UTC

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FusedBump96

Hello, me again! I really liked this chapter! Not quite sure of the specifics but the flow was good and there was real progress that I enjoyed! Not 100% sold on the Gloomy/Alex dialogue, it could use maybe a little tuning but overall very good! I think the direction the story is going is good (i.e., the character arc) and I'm liking it. But I do still feel that the sequence between chapter maybe 26-33/34 is a bit messy even with that in mind. It's possible though that reading them all in sequence with no gaps makes it work better, which it did for 30-34 for me. I like that you're trying to do something creative and interesting with the characters and the world! I'm now up to 36/37 and they do appear to be an extended flashback, so I'm probably going to pop the story down for a week or so and wait for the story to get back to the main timeline and catch up. Enjoy the weekend!

Predyca

Thanks a lot for the great chapter ♥ I really like Gloomy. I hope She pulls through! Alex, i hope you tighten your bootstraps!


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