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27 — Blood Mists Pt 1

🕑 Added 2025-05-10 09:45:04 +0000 UTC

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Gopard

I think you really need to work on either reducing the denseness of the mind fucked chapters or change the premise somehow... It gets really exthausting reading a very long chapter where the MC just goes insane. He literally is seeing wrong SYSTEM NOTIFICATIONS right? He's killing humans not vampires and doesn't realize... Just... Half of this crazed slaughter would have been enough I think at some point it just gets a bit over the top. And you run a huge risk of course... Because especially on Royalroad readers dislike mindfucked MCs almost allergically... I read this chapter as if He was influenced by the Lost Souls to perceive everyone in this fight as vampires mixing his horrible memory with the present. But I dislike reading mainly about crazy insane bloddthirsty Alex. The whole premise of the third Scenario is dificult already because it all feels like filler. Apart from the Eric sequence it reads like you just basically repeat the same paragraphs "Trudging on so and so many hours, lost souls, endless meandering on about the paths again and again, where is gloomy, where is gloomy, I need to kill Anne, Laura was killed horribly, vampires are evil bastards... ect..." its not bad yet I would say. But this chapter is pushing the line. Unless you have a good reason to write like this of course. But if after whatever "This" even was whatever actually happened here because we as readers cannot know it. We only get Alex POV who is clearly a 100% unreliable narrator. He could have literally dreamed even GOING To this mountain and I wouldn't say its a plothole with this chapter. Its just all way to unclear.

Logan

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