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INTEMPERANCE VII - Chapter 21, Fools Rush In
🕑 Added 2023-11-09 05:10:20 +0000 UTCMoving things along in the Celia, Jake, and Laura relationship. As always, let me know how I'm doing. Your input really does help shape the story and I value it, even if I don't always follow it. The plan continues to play out in this chapter. Are there pitfalls though? Perhaps.
Comments
Al Steiner
Yeah. Good catch.
Robert Kerr
I’m rereading a lot and just caught a minor error. In the paper work needed for the marriage license, you include Jake’s divorce decree, but Celia is divorced from Greg and would need to present her divorce decree too.
Gerald Deutsch
Just thinking. C, getting her Ring, never to be taken off, and a volatile marrige? Even with this narrative? No idea how that might work.
Al Steiner
Most of that will be covered in the next chapter.
Adam Driscoll
Thats a solid chapter. I love the deeper dives into what needs to be done for a show - and the reasons Jake gives for them. For the rest; things happen when they happen. The 2 years or so after 9/11 were *really* weird for concerts & movie releases, if memory serves. I'm pretty sure that we'll get Intemp on the road pretty soon. Also, did i catch a little foreshadowing during the wedding?
