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INTEMPERANCE VII - Chapter 23, I Remember You

🕑 Added 2023-12-24 04:34:39 +0000 UTC

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JC

And Book 9, and Book 10...

Steve Braden

great chapter Al, look forward to the next one and the new book!

Al Steiner

Thank you!

Al Steiner

I'm glad you're enjoying it!

Jack Andrews

This chapter was an absolute treat.

SteveZ

Interesting video on the downfall of rock music in the 1990s. Al, you have done your research on this topic. https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=reesdiAbvk4

Nigel Wordsworth

I just caught up with Intemperance having not read it for a while. I went back to book 3 and read from there. Now I am one chapter (or maybe two?) from the end. It’s a great series and I almost can’t wait for another two weeks to read more. Well done Al Steiner!

Al Steiner

It'll be corrected in the final edits.

Al Steiner

There is one chapter left in Book 7. As usual, I underestimated when I started Book 7 how much story I would have to tell to get to the end point. There will be a Book 8.

Rob H.

Someone else mentioned it, but I thought I would chime in as well. I started reading your stuff on StoriesOnline with Aftermath, which I've since read three times. I moved on to A Perfect World and Greenies, and Intemperance... Like Aftermath, I've read all of your stories multiple times, and I always find something new to enjoy with each reading. I've even considered printing them out and binding them in leather to put them on my shelves with the other authors I've enjoyed over the years. It's difficult to consider that there is only one chapter left in this epic saga, and I'm selfishly disappointed that I don't have your latest chapter to look forward to. I hope you keep writing, so I can keep reading your stories. Thanks for all your work and time.

JC

That's horrible. I don't know why anyone would stay in a "marriage" like that.

wulf losee

Ha! Thanks. It kept me from worrying.

JC

I am pretty sure it's supposed to be Gahn - please at least pick one and stick to it!

Al Steiner

I no longer even remember. I should have chosen a more unambiguous name back in the beginning.

JC

is Greg's last name Gahn or Ghan? You spell it both ways a few times in this chapter as well as in previous ones.

JC

i love this chapter, though it's very cynical about relationships, especially that ending. Horrible to think people would deprive their spouses for weeks.

Al Steiner

Good thoughts. You'll have to wait and see what scenario turns out to be the one.

Al Steiner

Our holidays were happy. Hope yours were the same.

Adam Driscoll

That was a pretty damn cool chapter. I particularly enjoyed the last section - Jake's past meeting his present - as a great way to tie things up. On the other hand *shakes fist* your chapter title has that damn song stuck in my head! Happy holidays to you & yours, dude.

Russ Wideman

the chance to see how you have evolved as a writer must have been interesting!

Al Steiner

That was exactly what I intended with those scenes. Jake was once a normal human being and he remembers people who were influential in his pre-fame past.

Al Steiner

I kind of had you in mind when I said not to read too much into the chapter, my friend. No dark conspiracies here, just people from Jake's past and what they think about him now.

Al Steiner

Fixed in the edit. Hope you otherwise enjoyed the chapter.

Al Steiner

Matt is just Matt. He's the easiest character to write dialogue for, also the most enjoyable with the possible exception of Caydee. I did plan to have him ask Jake who the fat chick was and have a conversation about that, but I was not able to squeak it in. Even Matt would not have asked that in her presence. I'm sure he asked about it in the green room, but that was off-page.

Al Steiner

Thank you. I do like to go back and visit previous characters when appropriate. I had envisioned doing this for Jake's solo tour but decided to wait for the Intemp reunion instead. And we haven't heard from all previous characters yet. There will be more.

Al Steiner

Thank you. I have the day off and the entire extended family is coming over to our house for a prime rib I'm cooking on the smoker.

Al Steiner

I was picturing Herb Tarlic from WKRP when I described the radio station manager's suit.

Al Steiner

It was a fun chapter to write. I did have to go back and read a lot of Book 1 to write it, but that was fun too.

Al Steiner

Now fixed.

Al Steiner

Thank you!

Al Steiner

I like to hear stories like this. As I've said before, when I first started writing Intemp, the story was supposed to be about the internal strife of the band demonstrated in Book 2, but when I found out how badly these bands were exploited by the record companies back in the 70s and 80s, that changed the entire focus of the tale.

Robert James

The people they have touched along the way... very humanising.

wulf losee

Thanks for your heads up not read too much into this chapter, but with all that attention that you lavished on those two women who were obsessing over Jake, I was getting a feeling that this was going to have a Sopranos ending. You've only got one chapter left after this one? Really? Happy holidays. Have a great trip. Cheers!

Michael Slade

It’s good to have you hear. -should be 'here'

Gregory Stewart

Two thoughts. Fucking Matt. And, what a chapter!

Alle Joeng

Early Christmas present indeed, morning of 24th (living in Europa)

Paul V

Al, thanks so much for this chapter. It’s the sort of character development and exposition that keeps bringing me back to your writing for what seems like 20 years - if not longer!

SteveZ

Caydee and Matt dialog - always amusing and fun to read - making me stretch brain cells to remember back to the kegger scene, and actually remembering the scene but only Mandy’s name, and some great writing. Christmas came early for fans of Al Steiner’s writing. Thanks Al for the latest chapter. May you and your family have a wonderful holiday season

Whicked

Sleazy business suit, Tower of power records a couple paragraphs on. Oh yes, I'm over here mangling Zappa's bobby brown and laughing

Al Steiner

will fix in edit

Terry Lacy

I have been reading your stories since Aftermath was about a 1/3 posted. So it has been a long time since these characters tripped across my brain cell. You have always had a nack for tying up loose ends we have almost forgotten about. I have been following a Mexican rock band of three sisters for 8 years now. They were just young girls who did cover videos on youtube for their grandparents. One of the videos went viral and started them on a path of a music career. Because of the Intemperance stories, I was glad to see them turn down multiple recording contract offers. They even declined two invites from AGT because they knew that would cost them artistic controll of their music. When they did sign a record deal, the negotiations took 7.5 months, and the girls read every page of the contract and made sure they understood everything in it. Their Patreon account turn out to be a major sticking point for the label, but they caved when the band said they walk away from the deal before they would abandon their fans. Sorry about the long post but I figured you would like to hear about young band that was avoiding some of the traps of starting out in the music business.